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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-05-02 10:04 PM


Swirling
Words
Caress the sides,
While the center whirl,
Pulls me inward.
Drowning
In poetic rambling baths,
Yet pleased,
Diversified
And pleasantly chilled,
By the onset of inspiration.
Words have a quality,
A joy
A tenderly sad, darkness even.
Whatever the theme,
Whatever the mood,
There are words,
Swirling,
And the center is the most appealing of all,
To get lost in,
To roll lazily around within.
And come out stengthened,
Then refreshed.


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Balladeer
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1 posted 2001-05-02 10:07 PM


Jenn, your words do all that...and more.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-05-03 12:04 PM


Drowning
In poetic rambling baths,
Yet pleased,
Diversified
And pleasantly chilled,
By the onset of inspiration.
Words have a quality,
A joy
A tenderly sad, darkness even.
Whatever the theme,
Whatever the mood,
There are words,
Swirling,
And the center is the most appealing of all,
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loved the flow and slow free fall feel of this..
well chosen format to accent the theme of the poem...
and yes...there are few sweeter pleasures than to be baptized in poetry  
well done poetess Jenn
jm

I miss you so much I cant stand it
Seems like my heart is breaking in two
My head says no, but my soul demands it
Everything I do reminds me of you

Greeneyes
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3 posted 2001-05-03 12:06 PM


an excellent write from you temptress....will add to my treasure box... be well....hugs to you...


Lauren~


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Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."


Rosebud1229
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4 posted 2001-05-03 12:07 PM


swirling around, that's what were all doing, no wonder I'm in a daze at times, enjoyed.
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2001-05-03 02:33 AM


Temptress~
Ahhhhhhh ... love that poetic bath !
Nicely done, poet.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Coal Surrender
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6 posted 2001-05-03 07:14 AM



Love your work, the scale of emotion is a pleasure to follow.

Coal

Irish Rose
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7 posted 2001-05-03 08:03 AM


I felt as if I were thrown a liferaft of poetry while drowning....a great feeling!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2001-05-03 12:29 PM


again, I am so impressed by your words of late and look for them each morning..*s  

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Brad Majors
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9 posted 2001-05-03 04:40 PM


Awesome piece!!! I'm adding this to the library!
PoeticKnight
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10 posted 2001-05-03 05:16 PM


Images of swirling in words...very cool.
Temptress
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11 posted 2001-05-03 07:19 PM


Balladeer,
I'm glad that you think so, and thank you for reading.  

Janet Marie,
Every time you read my work, I consider it an honor.   I'm glad you enjoyed this, and thank you for the reflections of your favorite parts.  

Greeneyes,
It would be a pleasure to be in your treasure box.   Thanks for reading.  

Rosebudd,
Its a good daze for sure.   Thanks for reading.

Marge,
I'm glad you liked this one!    

Coal Surrender,
I'm thinking that emotion and imagery are becoming my trademarks.   Thanks for reading and enjoying!  

Irish Rose,
Thank you so much!   I'm glad it gave you any sort of feelings.   When it does, I feel I'm doing well.  

nakdthoughts,
   Really?   I'm so glad you think so, and I'm happy to have you reading my work. Thank you!  

Brad,
An excellent place to be would be your library.   My honor. Thank you!  

Poetic Knight,
Thank you.   I'm glad the imagery worked for you as well.  


still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 05-03-2001).]

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2001-05-03 08:17 PM


An excellent write Temptress.  You capture the essence of this well.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Sven
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13 posted 2001-05-04 12:56 PM


ahhhhh. . .

now that's what I need right now. . . oh. . . I see that I've already gotten it. . .  

excellent. . .

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