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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22

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Franklin, TN

0 posted 2001-05-02 09:14 PM

Please let me know if you can follow this story line (lyric).......

STAND BY
V1
She was standing in the produce isle
something caught her way off guard
The woman who was screaming
Had her 3 year old by the arm

Left a mark across his face
And in another time and place
She would have walked right by

But this day she’d had enough
Stood her ground and she spoke up
Said, Lady, pick on someone your own size

CHORUS….

Cus I’ve seen thru his eyes and it’s not pretty
I’ve heard all the lines I can recite word for word
There’s no excuse for this and I for one
Just me, will not stand by

I can’t and won’t and will not stand by
Watch another suffer while I
Say it’s not my fault or business
If it’s not mine, who’s is it?

V2
Onions rolled across the floor
She didn’t even know what hit her
Husband saying something like
I can’t believe you call this dinner”

left a mark across her face
and in another time and place
she’d do anything not to cry

the phone is ringing, mamma callin
say’s there’s a line you should be drawin
cus if you don’t I’m drawing mine

(chorus)

She's on the phone again past midnight
listening to a frightened voice
the one she used to hear inside
to afraid to make a choice

feels the mark across her face
and in another time and place
she would have told her ,try not to cry

but she hangs on til 3am
says honey, I know where you've been
now it's time for you to decide

Cus you’ve seen thru those eyes And it’s not pretty
You’re heard all the lines, you can recite word for word
You know there’s no excuse and now it’s up to you
To not stand by

You won’t and can’t and will not stand by
Watch your daughter suffer and I
Know it’s not your fault or mine
But she can’t stand up………….
And you can’t stand by
Baby don’t stand by ,don’t stand by

(yes the rumors of my demise are false... lol)

Balladeer

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1 posted 2001-05-02 09:34 PM

I can follow it perfectly, Red, and it strikes very hard...very well done..

(first line...aisle)

redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22

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Franklin, TN

2 posted 2001-05-02 10:11 PM

OPPS........ dang the spell checker police got me!!. (dahh) sorry Balladeer.

redwriter1
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Posts 480
Franklin, TN

3 posted 2001-05-02 10:13 PM

Balladeer?......... Can you tell me who the ppl in the story are though? that's where others are telling me i didn't write it clear enough......

thanks darlin

Kay-lynn

and p.s. where did the "edit" button go?

Irish Rose
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4 posted 2001-05-03 06:40 AM

this is good, very real, I would love to hear this sung, and justice served on a hot plate....

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Sunshine

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5 posted 2001-05-03 07:16 AM

Hey Red, since 'Deer won't answer your question...about the people...

I see in the first, a woman who grew up a victim of child abuse; next, a woman who lives with a man who abuses her; and third, a mother who for the sake of her children, says, "that's enough!"

Ok, how far off am I? And I will be back!

And we're glad YOU'RE back!

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-05-03 07:30 AM

A nice song of substance...James

redwriter1
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Franklin, TN

7 posted 2001-05-03 07:49 AM

The woman is the same thru the whole song actually. She sees a kid being slapped and stands up for him... but can't stand up for herself until her mom calls....

"wake up call" if you will

she ends up manning a hotline, talking to a women who's "daughter" is being smacked around.. and tells HER to stand up..

(like her mom did for her, and she did for the boy)

Where did I lose ya?

Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-05-03 07:52 AM

I followed this, sometimes we can stand up for others but not ourselves.....
believe me, I know

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

redwriter1
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Franklin, TN

9 posted 2001-05-03 09:38 AM

Kathleen, for some reason, I knew you would reply. Thanks. I still love your signature line

redwriter1
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10 posted 2001-05-04 09:39 PM

Balladeer......... would you be so kind? (smile)

Balladeer

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11 posted 2001-05-05 10:24 PM

Hi, Red!! Finally made it back...it was a long trip!

I saw that it was the same person. The only thing different that I saw was that I felt that the second stanza was a flashback, a snapshot of her life which explained why she reacted to the child being abused in the first stanza and helping on the hotline in the third. Otherwise, I think I grasped your meaning fairly clearly....and I like it

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

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12 posted 2001-05-05 10:42 PM

And does it matter who the characters are as long as they are not being abused any more? Yes it could be a song. A sad one. Joyce

redwriter1
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Franklin, TN

13 posted 2001-05-05 11:56 PM

Wow, Balladeer, ya know.. I see what you mean .......That is a totally logical assumption, one I never thought of.

I think my 1s stanza "verse" must be misplaced.

It seems to confuse the listener and I don't wanna do that.

If i switched stanza 1 and 2.. would that make more sense? Cus I also thought the line "I've seen thru his eyes" came up too fast in the first verse without an explaination.... but truly....verse 1 and 2.. are just about 1 day in her life..... verse 3 is.... how it changed.

Am i digging in to deep? I want the story to be real, not contrived.

My whole point was at the end of this piece... you think she's talking to another abused woman on the phone.. but she's not.... she's talking to a woman who's "watching her daughter" be abused.. like she was. It's all about adults standing by and watching their children or anyone's children being abused.

Even though the woman in the grocery store was abused herself..that's not the point, the point is..... she didn't have the lightbulb come on til she saw someone smaller and weaker than her being abused..... (and then her mother stood up for her..... and so on)

Too deep??? lol

redwriter1
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Posts 480
Franklin, TN

14 posted 2001-05-05 11:58 PM

and p.s. Joyce.. yes it is a song. (smile).

If you email me, I will send you a small audio file if you like. Thanks for commenting........ it means alot to me.

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