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Jamie
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0 posted 05-02-2001 01:55 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Friday night jazz
Heineken by the bottle
a duet performing
old standards half-heartedly

Dirty windows obscure
an even dirtier river
love will wait
another night as
blenders mix
with strings and ivory
or am I just thirsty ?

Still the rhythm
moves me
while everyone else sits
dancing with
only their words
which move only
themselves

The duet plays on
oblivious
to black-eyed sharks
making empty promises
over half-empty glasses
of warm beer

And itís too late
and itís too sad
to think of you now
and the reality of
these feelings for you
which conjure visions
of a green sea
and blue jeans

All the while my eyes burn
as smoke smothers me
and I seek
to erase these words
that animate thoughts
of yesterdayís children
and tomorrowís debts

Turning
I look for another round
another song
needing neither
and disappointed by both

Just a few more chords
until my eyes close
and tomorrow arrives
without you

but I know dreams will recall
what time has forgotten

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

© Copyright 2001 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-02-2001 02:21 PM       View Profile for Lady In White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady In White

...and it's too late
and it's too sad

somehow, those two lines jumped out...perhaps because it sounded like an old song from days gone by.

Well done!
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2 posted 05-02-2001 02:42 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I loved your poem, but felt the pain in it, and I being older I guess, know this...that it is never too late, never.  Great poem.
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3 posted 05-02-2001 03:52 PM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

heartfelt words. I've read it several times .

Charisma

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4 posted 05-02-2001 07:39 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I could smell the smoke...hear the music..and feel the pain.....excellent sir.
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5 posted 05-02-2001 08:34 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

well done. . .

you've conveyed the image well. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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6 posted 05-03-2001 05:46 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

You know I love this...welcome to the world of contemporary writing hon - yup...that's what it is...

miss you...

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

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7 posted 05-03-2001 08:54 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very, very nice...James
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8 posted 05-03-2001 11:57 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

And itís too late
and itís too sad
to think of you now
and the reality of
these feelings for you

You certainly know how to make a woman sigh Jamie

Loved it my friend.

Maree  
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9 posted 05-04-2001 02:34 AM       View Profile for Joyce Johnson   Email Joyce Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyce Johnson

Happy dreams.  Joyce
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10 posted 05-04-2001 11:34 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Just a few more chords
until my eyes close
and tomorrow arrives
without you

but I know dreams will recall
what time has forgotten

...

Absolutely well-strung chrods these...

Much enjoyed this, my friend, Jamie,
Regards,
sudhir
Jamie
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Lady: thanks,,..it's too late baby now??--lol -- you don't want to hear me sing--

Mysteria: I am glad you liked it...(ps..i just meant too late at night    )

Charisma: thanks for reading it even once  

Sharon: Of course you could hon,, I mean,, you are psychic yanno... thanks kind lady

Sven: thank you very much!

K Me? Contemporary?   Your free versing has corrupted me....heh.... ( i suppose i should thank you..~shrug~ so..thanks   ) I miss you!

James: Thank you.

Maree: You aren't entirely without blame yanno...lol-- thanks for the sighs...

Joyce: Thanks, and to you also...

Sudhir: Thanks my friend ( whom I see way too little of these days btw....) Take care  

Paula Finn
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12 posted 05-05-2001 01:17 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Jamie...maybe she is just across that smokefilled room...or across the street...but she is there for someone as wondeful as you
Severn
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13 posted 06-06-2001 06:42 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

You know hon - I think this is perhaps my favourite, this and 'Largos'

I'm doing the re-reading thing tonight..truly, the atmosphere is amazing..and I can so see you there...this just means so much...

love   K

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 06-06-2001).]

Jamie
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14 posted 08-30-2001 08:26 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

maybe one day we shall both sit at the table where it was written  
hk>lk
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yes..sigh
 
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