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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Reflections She walks to the corner and looks up to the green mountains in the backyard of a city where she has lived for many years, a place where she has buried her heart and found it again gurgling with laughter. The steps are so familiar that a new brick in the wall is startling. Years have gone into collecting memories that she has sometimes stashed without thought, because to put them away was all she needed to forget, she thought. There are others that she folded with care and tenderly packed in tissue. These are the ones she takes out to feel again the fresh tear, to hear the beloved laughter, to touch the fabric of time past. She picks flowers from her garden, puts them on the table and walks around in her life, but, sometimes she thinks there is something that she has forgotten and it is important for it has left an empty chair at the place where her life gathers for nourishment. She cannot name it or give it face but she can play it on the black and white keys of her childhood piano, she can write it in poetry and she can whisper it in wonder when she is looking at the night sky. Today she glimpses it sideways peeking around the corner of her French door, covered with sunshine. It is her own reflection in the glass. In the dew of little things, |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Sincerely: this is terrific! "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You keep your promises very well....very well indeed.... and I keep keepers.... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Perfection in words. Joyce |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I too keep 'keepers' - I call them treasures |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nicely written  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey hon...your new picture is beautiful!!! WOW... I don't have much time this morning..and I'll come back and finish what I start here at a later date lol.. you said you wanted to learn how to condense? Let me illustrate how you could do that with your first verse - I think it's lovely as is, but if you wanted to go for a condensed look how about something like this: Walking to the corner she looks to green mountains in the backyard of a city where she buried her heart and found it again, laughing. ??? Something like that anywho... This is a lovely poem as usual hon...librarying and I'll come back to it properly ..miss ya...  K |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mabel--thanks for your sincerely and terrific...appreciate you taking the time to read. Karilea--I always try to. Joyce--Hardly perfection...but thanks for saying so. Bill--I know you must have many...thanks Vamdana--thank you for stoping by. Kamla--yes,thanks hon, that's just what I mean...hmmm, I could have done that...I think. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, You express yourself so well through imagery and it's always very lovely, my friend. Michael Proust- |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ This is just marvelously written ! You know I just love the little surprising turns your writing takes... 'She picks flowers from her garden, puts them on the table and walks around in her life, but, sometimes she thinks there is something that she has forgotten and it is important for it has left an empty chair at the place where her life gathers for nourishment.' So fresh and ORIGINAL ...  If you take out 'gurgling with laughter' ... I'm gonna spank you !  Beautiful, my friend. Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
love this one Martie. . . isn't that how it always is?? we sometimes don't see ourselves. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know...you absorbed me into this one, just the right amount of images that let me do some of the work, and I loved that. It is kind of like fill in the blanks and that makes for excellent poetry, which is something I am afraid I am starting to expect from you as you always deliver, wow, this was great! Please visit me at my new homepage: |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"She cannot name it or give it face but she can play it on the black and white keys of her childhood piano, she can write it in poetry and she can whisper it in wonder when she is looking at the night sky." Oh thank you for this, Martie, it reminded me of my piano as a child and I love to play. This is perfect! Kathleen Blake |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Years have gone into collecting memories that she has sometimes stashed without thought, because to put them away was all she needed to forget, she thought. There are others that she folded with care and tenderly packed in tissue. These are the ones she takes out to feel again the fresh tear, to hear the beloved laughter, to touch the fabric of time past. ========================= She cannot name it or give it face but she can play it on the black and white keys of her childhood piano, she can write it in poetry and she can whisper it in wonder when she is looking at the night sky. Today she glimpses it sideways peeking around the corner of her French door, covered with sunshine. It is her own reflection in the glass. ==================== and the view is BEAUTIFUL!!! and so is the intend of this poetic reflection. We love reading Martie memories   I miss you so much I cant stand it |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Martie, This is so beautiful I love when there is time to run through thoughts past and enjoy them once more really enjoyed this one Martie, a keeper for sure, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie..."..and walks around in her life.." A wonderful way to put it. Bob |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantastic writing, Martie! I enjoyed this very much! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
beautiful once again, Martie... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is fantastic..... I really enjoyed this martie~...Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
*applause* you have outdone even your splendid norm... wonderful poetry Martie. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a place where she has buried her heart and found it again gurgling with laughter. Right out of the gate the above phrase carried me away with you. I so like the response: Sincerely--this is terrific!!!, too. Then, more and more lines enthralled me. This is fantastic!! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you so much for your wonderful responses to this poem...I was a bit surprised to have so many...made my muse feel really good too. Hugs, you all!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've read this again and again... the depth is amazing, the imagery superb. but, sometimes she thinks there is something that she has forgotten and it is important for it has left an empty chair at the place where her life gathers for nourishment. Some lines make me smile... these make me ache... all make me think... and applaud. *S* |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
As with life, both happy and sad, but always beautiful! Corinne |
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