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hot chocolate and skies of peace |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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cowboys and boots with shadows of wrong wonderful thoughts for an old western song echoes and gunshots both too close to call a life without horses ain't no life at all warm summer nights with stars in the sky cups of hot chocolate and a womans sigh feeling at peace with the world all around and silence so sweet you hear every sound something to me and yet nothing to you these are some things that I love to do singing songs with no melodies or notes reading books to find hidden quotes watching great movies to pass out my day writting some words of things that I'd say sharing a few to see what's the cost learning a few things to see what I've lost laughing out loud for no reason you see grinning at the world because I choose to be me call me crazy, call me strange I feel at home out on the range where the silence is awesome and soft in my ears and there is nothing around you worthy of fears it's a taste of peace and love the difference is, it comes from above People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading your poem...James |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
beautiful images... the rhythm stumbles a couple of times, but a wonderful read nonetheless... it kinda makes me feel like i'm missin out, being a city boy. "and silence so sweet you hear every sound" there's somethin you can't get behind the city walls... i love that line. "Many great relationships start or end in a bar. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Absolutely wonderful. No, serious. Sounds trite, but I swear I'm being honest.  This reminds me of home...thanks for bringing me back. |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
from the plains I did roam, with parrie dogs pleading with a orange sunset backdrop. Thanks for making me reflect to what I call home. LP |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Des, This is just excellent.  Nothing like being in a place we feel comfortable. Loved this muchly.  *Jenn* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like this a lot. Thanks. Sandra |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Sounds as though you have your priorities straight. Nice poem. Joyce |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Des~ This is just a wonderful reflection of sincerity. Enjoyed it very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
is there anything better?? excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Desperado, I read this poem and just went Wow! I live in the country on a farm and enjoy the solitude of the area. I admit at times it can get old, but there is nothing like a evening by a warm fire in the country. Thanks for sharing. Dawn |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
well I would like to thank every one for replying to this poem. I've always love camping out and going backpacking, so this was something I enjoyed. perhaps the hardest part was trying to write it like I wanted to instead of to the rhythm of the song stuck in my head. the rhythm clashed several times because of that. things are going good right now. busy writting a story for the prose section as well. kinda spreading out a little more than I used to. have a few ideas for other things that I'm fixing up to be posted. once again, thanks for the input. People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Well, looks like I arrived a little late to the party. I usually try to get in here and respond pretty quickly to stuff, but can't catch them all I suppose. It would be very hard for me to eidt or critique this poem, because of the subject matter. This is HOME!! No better place on earth to hang your hat. You captured it great, although i'd change the womans sigh thing to fit me, like a strong arm around you or something. Other than that, bravo. Can't wait to be there. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
So Desperado, it sounds like you're missing home. I'm guessing you're in the service. Which one? How long are you to be in Seoul? With Memorial Day coming, I'm thinking you could do a bang up job on a poem for it. Would you be willing to accept that challenge? You certainly did a nice job on this one. As a teacher, I saw the word writing accidentally had two t's in it, I also noticed you didn't spell it that way in your critque request so I know it was only a typo. To find any other flaw, you'll have as me, or someone else to try harder. I enjoyed the read. That's what I get for going back, you need an apostrophe in "woman(')s sigh." There's my both barrels  [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 05-03-2001).] |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
VAS - thanks. I didn't even notice that when I wrote it. those darn apostrophies, always hanging around where you least expect them to be.... ' '' hehe oh and a poem for memorial day?? hmmm I'll have to get started on that then. knowing my luck if I wait till next week, it'll take a month to finish. oh, and yes, I am in the army. I was supposed to leave here the 13th of may, but I've been extended for a brief period of 6 weeks, partially because I'm in an nco slot and my replacement won't be here for a few more weeks. Therefore, I have been dubbed "mission essential," big words for "we don't want you to go cause you know too much." Either that or "we're too lazy to get a different replacement for you." Take your pick. So it looks like I won't be going home till 4th of july, which is a good thing because my car will certainly be ready by then and I can afford a road trip, or two, to dallas and grueene, tx to go dancing at one of the oldest dance halls in tx (and one of the wildest places to party too, but that's beside the point). thanks People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard |
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