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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2001-04-30 01:28 AM



Everything
I wish for
WRONG
a note in miss
of sing-a-long
following
the bouncing ball
each tear in drip
my script of song--
there are breaths
I cannot take
and leaps of faith
I cannot make
I am love
a puddle makes
one desire
overtakes
as everything
ignites in spark
surprising sing
of meadowlark
Lightning--
light wing-
Raptor's edge,
chalk in line
final death
Just as if
exists
a thing
the thought
reality unsing.

What can I do?
Someone, SAY.
Which shade of blue?
Would make you stay?
All of me
Is gone again
shades dismay
to love my friend
I wish that you would
talk to me...
I wish...I wish....
that you'd love me,,,
and make them all
just leave me be
and dance the fire
circle's truth,
and just one night,
with me---be you.

© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
1 posted 2001-04-30 01:46 AM


it's all a facade! love it yuh
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-04-30 02:12 AM


each tear in drip
my script of song--
there are breaths
I cannot take
and leaps of faith
I cannot make
I am love
a puddle makes
one desire
overtakes
as everything
ignites in spark
surprising sing
of meadowlark
==========================

What can I do?
Someone, SAY.
Which shade of blue?
Would make you stay?
All of me
Is gone again
shades dismay
to love my friend
I wish that you would
talk to me...
I wish...I wish....
that you'd love me,,,
and make them all
just leave me be
and dance the fire
circle's truth,
and just one night,
with me---be you.
=========================

girl your sense and instinct for rhyme and cadence is always dead on....
RHYME DIVINE baby....
I could eat it with a spoon  
very very cool write here me twin.
me

There are two lasting bequests
that we can hope to instill in our children
one is roots ...
the other ... wings.

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2001-04-30 02:50 AM


Serenity~
Just a great big WOW here !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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suthern
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Louisiana
4 posted 2001-04-30 04:52 PM


The first word swept me onto a ride I couldn't have left if I'd wanted to... add another WOW from me, please! *S*
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