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Ariana
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since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

0 posted 2001-04-28 06:06 PM

"Silhouettes In The Sand"

I have walked this lonely stretch of beach,
looking for peace and contentment.
The sound of the waves drown out the
crying of my heart's torment.
This day is just one of many that I have come here,
but it seems different in some odd kind of way.

I saw you sitting on the pier,
newspaper in hand, sun glasses and chair.
You also stroll the beach and I have been
watching you looking at me.
You have a beautiful smile and gentle face;
your large brown eyes are something to behold.
Without a word, I could tell,
that there is a story to be told.

Are you also slowly dieing of a broken heart?
Of a partner that doesn't need you any more
and wants to live apart.

I wave at you and you wave back.
I will see you tomorrow and maybe some day we will talk,
friend to friend, heart to heart, or
just become silhouettes in the sand.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-04-28 06:11 PM

Ariana~
I like this little walk along the beach.
Nicely done !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2001-04-28 06:19 PM

Very, very nice...James

Amuse_mi
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since 2001-04-22

Posts 110

3 posted 2001-04-28 07:05 PM

Nicely done.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

4 posted 2001-04-28 07:08 PM

This is lovely, Ariana...it's a very accessible narrative with great imagery...

I'll be looking out for more of your work..

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-04-28 08:29 PM

Very nice indeed!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-04-28 08:33 PM

love the picture that you've painted here. . ,

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Ariana
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since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

7 posted 2001-04-28 08:47 PM

Marge:  Thank you for walking with me along the beach and your kind comments.

James:  Nice hearing from you but I bet your beaches are nicer than here in Florida.

Amuse_mi:   I am glad that had a chance to stroll with me along the beach and for stopping by.

Severn:  Thanks for coming all the way from New Zealand.  I really appreciate your most generous comments - especially since I am new at writing poetry..

Sunshine:  I am sincerely glad that you liked my work and for stopping by.

Sven:  The sunset and sunrise at the beach is just breathtaking and maybe, some day, I can write a poem about the beauty of it all.  Thanks for stopping by.

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

8 posted 2001-04-28 10:17 PM

Oh, Ariana.....this is truly beautiful and tender in it's hope! How lovely it is when two hearts reach out as brand new friends. Yes, I do love this one very much, and am sending you hugs!!!!! Enjoy all that is new and sweet!!

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!

latin passion
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

9 posted 2001-04-29 03:03 AM

Your poem caught my attention as I read and reread. Each time I looked at it, I saw the long Hilton Head beaches. I have strolled those lines many a times, listening to the waves crash along the lines. How lucky you are to have found such a friend. LP

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

10 posted 2001-04-29 09:06 AM

i used to have a friend and she and i would go sit on a bench and watch people walk by and observe them and quietly try to figure out their "stories".... it was a wonderful exercise.... just to become so aware that you look beyond people's eyes....

anyway, this reminded me of that...

this had more, though... the imagining of a future love or friendship

i liked it very much

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

11 posted 2001-04-29 09:26 AM

This is lovely Ariana! You've painted this tender picture with wonderful imagery ... I could visualize this scene so perfectly ... very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

12 posted 2001-04-29 09:52 AM

like this silhouettes in the sand...touched my heart. Thanks for sharing.

((hugs))
Charisma

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

13 posted 2001-04-29 10:03 AM

Sunnyone:  I am glad that you could see the true meaning - I do appreciate your kind words of encouragement.  Hugs to you too!

Latin Passion:  I was born and raised in New England and I spent many a day and night listening to the waves.  Thank you for coming by.

doreen peri:  I read somewhere that if you looked closely, you could read an entire story in someone's eyes (sadness, happiness, etc) and I believe this to be true.   There alot of people that you meet in one's travels, and some are exceptional.  Thank you for your comments.

Kit McCallum:  Ah yes, it is a tender picture and with the beautiful climate in Florida, I hope to paint many more.  Thank you for stopping by.

Charisma:  Thank you for stopping by all the way from the Netherlands. I am very happy that you liked it.  Hugs to you too!.

Coal Surrender
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since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

14 posted 2001-05-03 07:50 AM

Soulful writing, Ariana. The southern shore, plays a magic tune.

Coal

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