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M
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since 2001-04-28
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0 posted 2001-04-28 12:18 PM


I must admit that
at first I was unsure.
Our eyes locked.
I was caught in your allure.

I was scared and afraid
but then our lips met.
Ecstasy replaced anxiety.
Nothing else could make me forget.

I opened up
and let you in my heart.
You're leaving now.
I don't want us to be apart.

Going away and giving up
are just lies.
When we kissed,
I felt those butterflies.

You feel this for me too
so when you walk away
hiding emotions and affections
it's only your heart you betray.

I hate good-byes
but you must depart.
Go, remembering the kiss
Taking whats left of my heart.

© Copyright 2001 M - All Rights Reserved
inot2B
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since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205
Arkansas
1 posted 2001-04-28 12:25 PM


Welcome to the circle of friends. I can promise that we won't leave you.

Enjoyed your poem especially these lines:
"When we kissed,
I felt those butterflies.


Yes I do remember those butterflies with that first kiss.  Mine stayed sorry yours left.  

latin passion
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 576

2 posted 2001-04-28 12:58 PM


read and reread your love tokens of praise. You conveyed compassion in your words, for what I too feel right now. One would ask do they really want to part?  I ponder on your "I hate good-byes but you must depart." I to as inot2B said "I can promise you that I won't leave you." LP
Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA
3 posted 2001-04-28 01:50 AM


"taking what's left of my heart" haunting line in an excellent poem.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2001-04-28 07:39 AM


Welcome to Passions, M! We sincerely hope you stay around and experience what our Hellos can be like...you might have found a new home! Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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5 posted 2001-04-28 07:51 AM


Welcome, M, to Passions...

yes - we won't leave you...we're pretty permanent...

K

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2001-04-28 10:40 AM


Welcome to the family!!! I look forward to reading more from you.  
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2001-04-28 10:43 AM


Welcome to Passions M!  This is a lovely first post, I hope to read more!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

suthern
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Louisiana
8 posted 2001-04-29 04:18 PM


That last line is so very painful... Welcome to Passions... this is a great entrance! *S*
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