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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-04-26 10:47 PM


I am a fool
I know I am--
a hero's journey
without plan
and every time I take a step,
I know I trek a path unchecked--

But still there is resounding hum
mantra of this thing undone
Aleph--Bayet-
Life and Death
continuum
shallow-depth
darkness--light,
exhale, inhale,
a glimpse in dark
of fleshly pale
the madness of a clock in tick-
suspicion--there must be a trick--
I must not be the only one
undone by time's cruel pendulum.

May all my busy-ness of mind
just like the clock, become unwind
the circle of two hands in spill-
within the center--time stands still.
In the center, find the door.
In nothingness you will find more.

To find the treasure hid by hell,
you must first trek path of self.
As hands of clock encircling,
you'll find yourself encompassing--
be wary of your hands want more...
Within the center?
Open door.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-26-2001).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-26 11:45 PM


But still there is resounding hum
mantra of this thing undone

=======================
exhale, inhale,
a glimpse in dark
of fleshly pale
the madness of a clock in tick-
suspicion--there must be a trick--
I must not be the only one
undone by time's cruel pendulum.
=====================
the circle of two hands in spill-
within the center--time stands still.
In the center, find the door.
In nothingness you will find more.


To find the treasure hid by hell,
you must first trek path of self.

As hands of clock encircling,
you'll find yourself encompassing--
be wary of your hands want more...
Within the center?
Open door.
=====================

(only we can set ourself free??)

this is so damn cool sen....
wisdom, spirituality, unrequited dreams, fate, destiny,...
this is as cool a sen candle dance  
this one goes in me twin collection
awesome write me girlie
will take many reads to see all of this ones many gifts wrapped in rhyme
me

Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
For I have loved the stars too fondly ...
To be fearful of the night.

nakdthoughts
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Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2001-04-27 12:37 PM


the madness of a clock in tick-


love this line...this poem is  soooo YOU..I really enjoyed it..by the way..pretty picture ..*s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Honeybee
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3 posted 2001-04-27 12:45 PM



I was enthralled from beginning to end, I relate on so many levels, what a passionate, mournful, insightful write!~

Take care,
Melissa~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 04-27-2001).]

Coco
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since 2001-01-28
Posts 48

4 posted 2001-04-27 01:39 AM


"In the center find the door"

Serenity, sweetie I missed reading your poetry but I'm back now and here to stay and I wanna say this poem is absolutely great...
Sometimes the steps we take in finding the center may take a lil time but once we're there we discover the door is ajar as we then proceed in strength of stride across the bridge of tomorrow's new paths...

Hugs2UdearPoetFriend




Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2001-04-27 02:07 AM


And if the door opens? Love this one serenity.  
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2001-04-27 04:50 PM


Thanks to all---and Sharon? The thing is--the door is always open--locks are just the illusion!  
doreen peri
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7 posted 2001-04-27 09:00 PM


bravo!!!!!!!



quote:
Aleph--Bayet-
wassat?

the madness of a clock in tick-
suspicion--there must be a trick--
I must not be the only one
undone by time's cruel pendulum.

fabulous lines!!!!



geezharpo... you got the timin' goin' on girl!!! this one's right on time!!!  

doreen peri
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8 posted 2001-04-27 09:04 PM


i forgot to say that an open Dor or a closed Dor is a major theme with me... hehe.... i try to keep mine closed tight as a drum but... lol... sometimes actual light slips in and the Dor opens up.... still gotta keep the weather stripping on though... y'know? there's a keyhole i sometimes put masking tape on, btw, just in case you need to explore that option... *grin
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2001-04-27 09:04 PM


Hey lucy! thanks....the "Aleph-Bayet" first two letters of the Hebrew alphabet...which according to a kabbalic tradition I once studied represented.. life/death....although the spelling of Bayet is up for grabs depending on whom you study---I KNEW you would ask!!!! Thanks, and love ya much!
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
10 posted 2001-04-27 09:09 PM


"I am a fool
I know I am--
a hero's journey
without plan
and every time I take a step,
I know I trek a path unchecked--"

Wow! Such wisdom from a coonass....hee hee...ya know I'm just funnin' don't ya???

Love the opening stanza...and that's not taking anything away from the rest of it.  Great right...enjoy this a bunch.

jwesley

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
11 posted 2001-04-27 09:53 PM


quote:

the madness of a clock in tick-
...
within the center--time stands still



why did these two lines stand out so...I don't know, but sometimes one shouldn't nudge the Muse...

A good read, Serene one....

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
12 posted 2001-04-28 01:11 AM


somehow those hebrew words reminded me of  "the alpha and the omega, the beginning and the end"...

i thought it was related... thanks!!!

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