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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Long hours when I should be sleeping Spent in tortured, endless weeping. I'd have been better just keeping My thoughts hidden inside. I suppose there was a yearning For denial that one's spurning Love offered, intense and burning. But why did I confide? For worries I had wished concealed I later learned had been revealed. Betrayal I can't help but feel, My trust has been decried. I'll just take this heart that's breaking And be silent - won't be making The mistake of again staking Faith in you, for that's died. You'll no more know my hopes and dreams; I won't be fodder for your schemes. I live in hell or so it seems - I hope you're satisfied. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Bless your heart. That is the worse form of betrayal ... tho' no betrayal is good. Write on. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I HATE when this happens---what's the saying tho, "better to remain silent and be thought a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt..." But seriously, don't give up, suthern! There ARE people who understand, and if ya never share, you may never find your kindred spirits. I'm certainly glad I discovered YOU! (Or was that the other way around?) HUGS.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ *Hugs* to you - And a pox on anyone who would betray the confidence of another. Well-said, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
suthern, To have our trust betrayed is the worst of feelings. I'm so sorry to hear this and wish you my best. ((hugs)) Michael Proust- |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Interloper: Nope. *S* Betrayal, by definition, is "don't wanna go there" bad. *S* Thank you for reading! *S* serenity: Thank you so much, dear lady... but did you have to remind me of that saying AFTER I've removed all doubt? LOL. Where were you when I needed a gag? *G* I'm not sure who discovered whom... I'm just glad we did. *S* Enjoy Jazz Fest for me... I canceled my N.O. plans last night... so have fun enough for both of us. *S* Marge: You sweetheart... you do know that I only whine so I'll get a Marge hug, dontcha? *G* And I do value them mightily! *S* (Which means I'll probably keep whining. *G*) But I agree about the pox... no excuse justifies. Thank you so much! Auguste: I wrote a similar poem several years ago... you'd think I'd get wiser instead of just older? LOL Thank you for your kind comment and the hug... both are appreciated! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll just take this heart that's breaking And be silent - won't be making The mistake of again staking Faith in you, for that's died. ======================= dreams die hard dont they... this reads like a heartbreaking country song Ruth, your cadenece has melodics runnning thru it.. and you wrote this with a clever and cool rhyme scheme... and as always..your signature heartstring pulling emote of emotion. But I also read an underlying defiance and strength in this as well... someone taking back the pride and drawing lines in the sand... saying enough is enough. hugs to ya Ruthy-girl Though my soul may sit in darkness, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Suthern.....this hurts...very powerful write my dear...hugs to you |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Suthern girl, there is NOTHING more despicable that someone who betrays a confidence...as everyone who has responded to this well know. I can certainly understand your anger and frustration....all we can do is learn from our mistakes, I guess. You have penned it very well, suthern lady |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Hurtful write, suthern, but you have expressed these awful feelings wonderfully, as usual! Yes, shame on anyone that would betray someone like you! I don't normally give out cyber-hugs, but, here's one for you, m'friend...*HUG*... sp  to be with you... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Well now, to trust is not a bad thing. Lbut to betray a trust is despicable. This too will pass, Dear poetess. Joyce |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I believe that all can be revealed...but only to a chosen few...we must learn to chose and evaluate wisely...even within the confines of love and respect...James |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
If only we had an automatic zipper that would close just as soon as we say, "Don't tell anyone what I'm going to tell you." Heck if the person repeating what I'm telling would just repeat what I said with out adding to it, it wouldn't be so bad. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Suthern ... powerful write, and great rhyme scheme, it fit the mood you set perfectly! I could feel this, I've been in these shoes too. Sometimes I think there's truly nothing worse than this ... the pain of betrayal and lost trust are strong, and you've brought them out well in this piece, very well written! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 04-26-2001).] |
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Tessa Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 67Ohio |
How painful.........this betrayal. I do agree though, with so many others that have commented, you did an excellent job with this write. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Yes Suthern, you have expressed yourself well...but I believe now that I just never tell anyone something I don't wish anyone else ever to know..no matter how much I wish to trust them..I have decided I will always learn to defend my thoughts and words instead, so if that occurs to me which it has, I will be able to "carry on" without feeling hurt...or having to defend myself...or another huggss....not sure I got my thoughts across..but it's late here ~Wynter/M "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah my heart is going out to you cause I had that done to me and it really hurts big time! I sure have to agree with nakdthoughts, as I too now only tell things on the internet especially that I AM SURE 100 people are going to read. It takes time to trust people and a lot of work, and when they violate that trust, a bond is broken sometimes that can never be repaired and if it is everything from that point on is with some trepidation. Hugs to you and trust me there are good people out there honestly, you just have to keep testing the water and pray you don't get your hand burned. By the way, after all that, your poem was perfect in form and feeling. Please visit me at my new homepage: |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
many a night did i spent like this. *hugs* i know how it feels to have your trust betrayed like this. so from one southerner to another i am here for you *hugs* love ya jesse All I feel is hurt and sorrow, praying it'll all be gone by tomorrow but as tomorrow rolls around, another tear hits the ground. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Janet Marie: Let's just make sure the singer is male and drop-dead gorgeous... and I'll give up rock 'n roll! LOL. Thank you, sweet lady... most lines I draw in the sand are washed away by the next tide... but I very much appreciate your comments (and all these hugs I'm getting are an unanticipated bonus... and pretty dern nice! *smirk*) SEA: I'm sorry it hurts, dear lady... I think we've all felt the sting of betrayal at times... those who haven't are very lucky indeed. *S* Thank you! Balladeer: You are a sweetheart, yanno that? *G* And zipped lips can still pucker... smooooooooooooooooooooooch! *S* Thank you very much, kind sir! snowpants: Thank you so much... and your hug is even more appreciated knowing the rarity. *S* Joyce: So very true. *S* Thank you very much for reading! James Michael: A couple of people know my deepest darkest secrets, love me anyway, and will never betray me... and these people are more valuable to me than all the gold in the world... more treasured than life itself. *S* Thank you! inot2B: ROFL... Ain't that the truth, though? LOL. Thank you so much for reading... and for the levity! *S* Kit: I read somewhere that iambic pentameter feels so right in poetry and prose because it fits the thought and speech patterns of most people... Since I am NOT in that select group, I'm so glad this works! *S* Thank you so much... your kind comments are always greatly appreciated. *S* Tessa: Thank you so much! nakdthoughts: Your thoughts got across and are understood well. *S* Thank you very much! Mysteria: I do know there are good people... I'm privileged to have some of them in my life... including a few I met here. *S* Thank you so much, dear lady... and hugs back to you. *S* That "perfect" will have me walking on air all day! *G* Jesse: You are a dear and I thank you very much!!! Hugs back atcha! *S* Please believe me when I say that I appreciate every expression of sympathy to the very core of my being... When you give someone your trust, you've given them a priceless gift... when they betray that trust, they've trashed something precious and forever changed the dynamics of the relationship. And I couldn't have written this if I hadn't experienced the devastation of knowing my confidences had been misplaced and betrayed. Having said that... I was asked last night if this was written about a particular person... the obvious and most honest answer is yes. *S* But keep in mind that I am NOT good at letting things go (and can hold a grudge till the cows come home *S*), so my poems often have nothing to do with the here and now. *S* This one did... but mainly as a reminder to myself... I'd like to think I'd never betray a confidence, but I found myself stuck in a situation where too many secrets had me caught in the middle. I'm only human and there was a niggling little demon thought visiting that MY life would be much easier if the beans were spilled. *S* A poetic lecture that betrayed confidences never make anything easier resulted... I apologize profusely to those of you who might be offended... My hope is that you'll be pleased for me that I'm not writhing under such agony at this moment. *S* For all the teasing, every hug and expression of understanding is treasured... Those betrayals I have experienced still sting and your caring is balm to this soul. Thanks to all... Ruth |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Suthern, thank you4this most enjoyed read... I'm really glad I got this chance2peak thru the archives2nite and pull up this treasure which I have now found... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Coco: It was an unexpected delight this morning to see that an oldie had resurfaced. *S* I thank you so much. *S* |
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