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helen smith
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0 posted 2001-04-25 12:12 PM



She twists her rings while dreamimng.
Gaudy diamonds  flash upon her hand .
She thinks.  She should have left  them home.
Yes .. and the golden band .

He watches missing nothing.
Though his eyes are fixed ahead.
He reads the signs along the highway.
Reading signs now..would she lie upon his bed ?

The winking neons all are grinning .
Enticing .offering of their wicked way.
And he knows she's in a quandary.
And she's  thinking..will she play? She draws her skirt down tightly.
Thinking , twisting.She is really only clay.
He leaves the straight and narrow.
What will everybody say ?

A comforting touch.
He reaches. Searching fingers find her hand .
All her diamonds ?They have vanished .
Nothing.Naked.Bare now ..even of the golden band .


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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-04-25 01:55 PM


this is so real (small spelling - dreaming)
I enjoyed it!!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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By the sea
2 posted 2001-04-25 02:49 PM


So much said in so few words.  This is very good writing.  

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

JLR
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3 posted 2001-04-25 07:23 PM


Thought provoking departure...enjoyed!
Waseem Cheema
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since 2001-03-16
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Pakistan
4 posted 2001-05-20 08:16 AM


Your poem is too like the DIAMONDS.. very expensive thinking, very cute wording and every thing .......

I love to nice poetry.

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