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Lady of the Lake
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Lady of the Lake |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
She looks out upon the water Wondering what ever happened to her The smell so fresh and wind so cool Makes her sight so much farther Little does she know, one exists too, Her equal, just across the water Sometimes he thinks of her, Sometimes she thinks of him He looks out upon the same blue lake Wondering what it will take To be immortal together A picture they would make As waves getting wetter Getting lost in the memory wake Sometimes he thinks of her, Sometimes she thinks of him If only their eyes, lids open could see Each other waiting distantly A perfect mirror of one another Each, a lifetime waiting patiently Will that time come? they wonder Would that it could, one day be Sometimes he thinks of her, Sometimes she thinks of him Sometimes it’s all she can take When she becomes, The lady of the lake |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
very well written! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I don't have words beautiful enough to tell you how this has touched me. Just know, it has.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
who's the king of swoon now PK???  excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tessa Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 67Ohio |
I love the repetition in this.......and the way you've taken the time to capture the whole picture, rather than just touching it here and there. Was very rich with emotion. Well done. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Enjoyed very much! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I did enjoy this so PK......beautiful..... On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Needed to put this in my library..... *sigh* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Little does she know, one exists too, Her equal, just across the water Sometimes he thinks of her, Sometimes she thinks of him He looks out upon the same blue lake Wondering what it will take To be immortal together A picture they would make As waves getting wetter Getting lost in the memory wake =================== and for some things we could walk on water have always thought this was one of your best PK... (seem to say that a lot around you) must mean you're a poet--huh *S* I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
A beautiful and great write! Nathan |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"...sometimes its all that she can take..." Excellent, Sir. Excellent. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
so if they don't know of each other and yet they think of each other, is it their hope of one they are destined with which to share eternity? is that the crux of this romantic piece? I mean like is it a "Somewhere Out There" piece? [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 04-24-2001).] |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Take my words just a little less literal VAS. They were thinking of her/him asa being the ideal, the thought of someone...made for each other, yet not knowing each other. So many people in the world, does anyone else wonder these things? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
how could I not? |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
beautiful. a wonderful tale! "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" |
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