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Too Many Thoughts (is it the writing?)
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Too Many Thoughts (is it the writing?) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Outside the day, dying down, Furrowed brows and swishing pen, Come closer eyes of darkened brown, Soon midnight comes again. Faithful few to words, enlist Pouring reason from within. Softly now, troubled words announce, Reason, pride, passion denounce. Tortured few, we are same, Ever searching, passion blame. Am I now haunted by the ghosts of words put to rest and ghosts of words arrived, suspended, and not said yet? How must I live this way? This way of not having my pen attatached by surgeon to my hand or having my head buried in some book? How must I live this way? It is torture when I cannot pick up my pen. It is torture when I can then pick my pen up, and not recapture words that, in a blissful moment of clarity, breathed from within me; then vanished with a cruel flash of eyes just before they evaporated within the jungle of my mind. Ohh..Cruel words, be kind this once, and let me have myself. With all that is me and more, I am humbled by your powers to weaken me to the point of feeling near death. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention. [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 04-23-2001).] |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is really cool! I love the imagery you use. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Don't feel like you are the only one that happens to. I like your description of it very much....you have a great style and it comes off very poetic! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Its is very nice .........be brave , You recieve a ray of hope soon.......lolo I love to nice poetry. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Shades of Poe, and beautiful picture too. I loved this! Kathleen Blake |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hey lovie, I just dropped in and saw you here all forlorn and morose an all and I thought to myself, "Jenn shouldn't be sad. It's against every law that I can think of." So I'm sittin here trying to think of somethin to make ya chipper up some. Y'know, like long walks through the woods or maybe a hotair balloon ride across the coast? Those sound like fun, they would certainly cheer me up some. Tis quite a shame that I'm stuck here in the library at a school in a square state in the middle of the country, cuz I'd love to help cheer ya up some, y'know. And, seeing as how this ain't sposed to be no "chat room" or whatever, I guess I would love to stick in a little something about yer poem that was ever so lovely: I almost think yer punctation needs to be modified just a touch to better suit your rhythm (thas just me though); yer flow 's spectacular just like you!; and of course, I've always loved yer word choice, 's truly spectacularly done! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
stop. . . pick up the pen. . . and stop. . . think about why this is so. . . excellent writing. . . but. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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