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Shadows 'cross the Floor

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Effigy
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0 posted 04-23-2001 12:01 AM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy

I have seen your phantoms,
those ghost of
some long time before.

I’ve seen in the shadows
those ghost a
crawl’en 'cross the floor.

Silky shadows are know’en
those dreams, just
ghost of long before.

But ghost can be like
phantoms they
walk'en 'cross the floor.


[This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 04-23-2001).]

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Brad Majors
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1 posted 04-23-2001 02:36 AM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

I really like this piece. Hope to read more!
ethome
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2 posted 04-23-2001 02:43 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Ghosts can be that way...I enjoyed the read!
Effigy
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3 posted 04-23-2001 04:13 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

Thanks. I'm glad that you could enjoy the read.
Sven
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4 posted 04-23-2001 07:30 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

love the dialect that you've used here. . . fits the piece well. . .

great job!

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Joyce Johnson
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5 posted 04-23-2001 09:26 PM       View Profile for Joyce Johnson   Email Joyce Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyce Johnson

Those ghost a crawlen across the floor.  I like this.  Joyce
Tessa
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6 posted 04-23-2001 09:41 PM       View Profile for Tessa   Email Tessa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tessa

wonderful flow and uniqueness to this.  
Watersign6
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7 posted 06-07-2001 09:27 PM       View Profile for Watersign6   Email Watersign6   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watersign6's Home Page   View IP for Watersign6

absolutely amazing writing and love your style too  
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YES!
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This is excellent, Wes. Excellent. This piece smacks of Robert Burns, especially his famous "My Luv is Like a Red Red Rose". Your focus in this piece is to present the words as they actually sound, not like they are technically spelled. This one is definately going on the favorite's list.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

 
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