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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Withdrawn just another jagged rhyme forever bumped out of line all the tears that bled slowly fade from red all the things on curbs in heap knowing what to save and keep it is, such a silent word yes. yes. Yes. i think i heard all familiar things..... gone promises.............withdrawn "...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Tender, sad little poem. Joyce |
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Amuse_mi Member
since 2001-04-22
Posts 110 |
Very, very, very nice. I like the rhythm and the tempo of meter. I envision an emotional snapshot....the freeze frame image of transition between that last surge of emotion and the still calm of numb. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is very sad, it reminds me of cleaning up the cubbyholes and not really wanting to throw anything out. I recently tried that but ended up keeping most everything I should have trashed. Kathleen Blake |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah...this one speaks to me today. Thank you. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Sad but well said. Enjoyed. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OneSlickLady~ You write with a sad pen in this. Hope it's just good poetry ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
h . . . this rips, this tears . . . love your work, you do it well, but hope more joyful words come soon . . . e |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
he will Berrnie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. Bernie Slicker [This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 04-25-2001).] |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
A very melancholy poem. I enjoyed it very much. I like poems of a more sad and even morbid nature. I am very new to this web site and it seems great. such a vast array of thoughts. Loved your poem =) your poem pal, Joe |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Excellent Job..... |
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Tessa Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 67Ohio |
I know this feeling. You've expressed alot of emotion in this. I enjoyed it very much. |
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