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Krawdad
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0 posted 2001-04-18 01:26 AM



Rolling thunder / Greedy blunder


Fat corpulent overfed clouds

sated beyond sated with

voluminous vapors from

steaming black soils.


Fat corpulent overfed men

sated beyond sated with

sumptuous servings from

steaming black ovens.


Soils from grinding glaciers

soils from verdant prairies

mined over and over

are cashed in by the kernel.


Standing now in black monument

in their thirst and in their hunger

they feed the skies to rolling thunder

they feed the thighs to greedy blunder.


Krawdad
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Panne447
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1 posted 2001-04-18 02:05 AM


I liked it and think it is so true - I am sad to say. Nicely put together - loved the 'soils' throughout. Panne
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2 posted 2001-04-18 12:03 PM


Very well written. A very sad but true picture you give us.
VAS
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3 posted 2001-04-18 12:28 PM


Good, good, good!  Well-written that is!  The vivid descriptions are superb!  Krawdad, you've done it again!!!!!
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2001-04-18 03:20 PM


Loved the comparison/contrast in this piece--very effective imagery e! I like your style!
Krawdad
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5 posted 2001-04-22 02:50 PM


Penna
Brad
VAS
Serenity
Thanks all for reading and for the compliments. (tho something less depressing would be more fun, no?)

Krawdad
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Parker
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6 posted 2001-04-22 03:18 PM


Krawdad, this was way too cool to read. loved it.

Parker

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7 posted 2001-04-22 03:19 PM


Krawdad, this was way too cool to read. loved it.

Parker

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