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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
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High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2001-04-17 10:58 PM



today
i missed you once
and then i missed you twice
i was dreaming out the window
spreading seeds of thoughts to reach your doorstep
i wonder if you felt the breeze
as i whispered to you
from far away
today

-dgvarner
4-17-01

time makes us bolder..even children get older..and i'm gettin' older too...
-stevie nicks

© Copyright 2001 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved
Packratmike
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since 2001-02-25
Posts 632
California, USA
1 posted 2001-04-18 12:06 PM


i wonder if you felt the breeze
as i whispered to you
from far away

BRAVO!!!  Excellent, perfect and beautiful rictameter!

Mike


Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

2 posted 2001-04-18 12:08 PM


dg,
Ahhh, yes, and a nice gentle breeze it was too.
Where been ya?  Or...let's see...have I been missing...hmmmm?
Well, anyway, nice to read you again.
Kraw'

Krawdad
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Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
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3 posted 2001-04-18 01:02 AM


hey sweets,,, yeah there was a big breeze.... was that you  .

Very nice write I like alot.

Parker

KokoStewartKoomoa
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Waikiki, Hawaii
4 posted 2001-04-18 02:12 AM


ohhh excellent rictameter too! I agree Bravo!

Aloha with warmest regards, Koko
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EagleOne
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5 posted 2001-04-18 06:32 AM


Oh yes! I do like this.

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown


Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
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6 posted 2001-04-18 11:15 AM



Yes! This is a perfect rictameter, perfect in sentiment and expression, you've done very well, I love it!  

Take care,
Melissa~

Agust P
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7 posted 2001-04-18 01:06 PM


excellent, I loved it!! AP
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8 posted 2001-04-18 01:45 PM


DG~
I really enjoyed this.
Lovely treatment of the rictameter form ...
beautiful thoughts in any form !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
9 posted 2001-04-18 11:31 PM


MIKE..thanks much for the BRAVO!  

KRAW..so good to see you..i've been here and there..    thanks for stoppin in to see me!

PARKER..it was me, love..  

KOKO..many thanks for a second BRAVO..you people are way too kind..!  

EAGLE..i thank you friend..  

MELISSA..thank you for PERFECT!  

AP..good to have you love it!   thanks for your reply

MARGE..thank you for gracing my first rictameter!  (i hope i did it right! just copied PARKERS! lol) glad you enjoyed it..  

hugs, g

time makes us bolder..even children get older..and i'm gettin' older too...
-stevie nicks

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
10 posted 2001-07-14 12:33 PM



dg-
   well, lookie there at you stepping out
   into a different format...
   i like it MUCH!
   this is really cool..
   you have to tell me the rules of this one..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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