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Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

0 posted 2001-04-17 06:33 PM

If love were an ocean
would I still brave the violent storm
to search for you?

As the waters of fear smashed my sail
would I turn back,
or die trying to reach you?

At times you are within my grasp
then the waves steal me away
telling of danger and harm

so I sail again toward you
only to be turned away in despair

when I grow tired of trying
and wish I could change course
the waters drift me closer to you
not close enough to touch you
but close enough
to stir my heart once more

Once again begain my endless voyage
reaching only anticipation
but never coming aground
on affections' sweet shores.

If you are a torturer
then you do your craft well
or do I run these jagged rocks
through my heart
of my own free will.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-17 06:46 PM

well written employ of metaphor and imagery to define the emotions intent...
well done poet sir.

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-04-17 06:49 PM

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2001-04-17 06:59 PM

I think sometimes we must do it of our own free will. Excellent poetry and images, sir.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

PoemCrazy
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since 2000-11-30

Posts 159

4 posted 2001-04-17 07:18 PM

Hi!

he he he - is the text color intentional?
and the shape - like waves.
well, if you look sideways...tom

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-04-17 07:28 PM

I think some people are just plain mean. Why would you torture yourself of your own free will? Someday, you will find someone who treats you right. Nice writing.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

6 posted 2001-04-17 07:44 PM

thank you!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2001-04-17 07:48 PM

Brad - well done! Like the ocean setting.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

8 posted 2001-04-17 08:37 PM

Brad..."...jagged rocks through my heart of my own free will.." My. Gripping. Well said. Bob

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