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Kay
Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 70

0 posted 2001-04-15 08:05 PM

His touch is a plume
and designs my cheek in a wisp
and it rests there.

Oh! I feel his presence
the moment he walks into the room.
Until the first brush of his fingers
crosses my lips,
to catch the moistness
and yes, cause it.

I open my mouth slightly
and taste him.

But when his rough knuckles
draw the feeling from my
gaze and I know, this is
what breath is,
When the room is still
and everyone leaves…

He is! He just is,
a part of fantasy, yes.
He is time’s gift to me.
For ever so dazzling
is that arm around my waist
as he celebrates
the last dance with me.

Kay
Let no one who loves be called unhappy. Even love unreturned has its rainbow." ~James M. Barrie~

[This message has been edited by Kay (edited 04-15-2001).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-04-15 08:18 PM

You've really captured that magical joy here, Kay! Your imagery provoked some very sensory responses!

I liked this much. Look forward to reading more from you!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-04-15 08:18 PM

Yep...liked it that much! lol...and

(told ya my response was sensory!...smile)

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-15-2001).]

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

3 posted 2001-04-15 08:20 PM

The intensity of this is amazing. I've read it 3 times and will save it to read again. Thanks.

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-04-15 08:27 PM

Amazing imagery!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-04-16 07:40 AM

His touch is a plume
and designs my cheek in a wisp
and it rests there.

Oh! I feel his presence
the moment he walks into the room.
Until the first brush of his fingers
crosses my lips,
to catch the moistness
and yes, cause it.

I open my mouth slightly
and taste him.
======================

very nice Kay...
sensual with anticipation and intensity...
very cool write of images and emotions.
cool title too
well done poetess

In another life...I know I loved you then
Lightning strikes twice...we're destined again.
We dont have to make promises...we were always meant to be

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

6 posted 2001-04-16 11:07 AM

Subtle sensuality clearly exposed, concluding in an almost somber breath.
Pleasing work,

Coal

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