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Embers_Before_God
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0 posted 2001-04-15 12:02 PM



Heart of broken glass
Saltless tears of sorrow

Is the equation for lust,
Love plus desire?

My eyes swell with each passing moment
When I see your shadow slowly fade away
Restless and weary are my heart and soul
When your perfume no longer lingers

Your eyes give me strength,
Your passion gives me hope
Your body, your hair, your essence,
Gives me the shakes

A lifetime it takes
for the Moon to circle thrice
Yet, still I watch and wait
Oh, so impatiently

Whispered words like honey
sweeten my soul
I long to caress you,
To hold you, to kiss your pouting lips

How I wish you were near
When you are so far
How I wish you were close
When you’re even one heartbeat away

I’ll dream of you
pressed gently to my side
I’ll lust for you
Until the moon circles thrice

My heart is broken glass
My saltless tears full of sorrow


TkB
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All Rights Reserved



Dance with me under the moon.  Touch my pale skin.  Devour me.  Love me.

[This message has been edited by Embers_Before_God (edited 04-17-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-04-15 12:04 PM


only in dreams....enjoyed this so much.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Embers_Before_God
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2 posted 2001-04-15 12:39 PM


Thank you Irish Rose for your comment.  I appreciate it...Embers

Dance with me under the moon. Touch my pale skin. Devour me. Love me.

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-04-15 12:42 PM


Heart of broken glass
Saltless tears of sorrow

Is the equation for lust,
Love plus desire

My eyes swell with each passing moment
When I see your shadow slowly fade away
Restless and weary are my heart and soul
When your perfume no longer lingers
=======================

A lifetime it takes
for the Moon to circle thrice
Yet, still I watch and wait
Oh, so impatiently

Whispered words like honey
sweeten my soul
I long to caress you,
To hold you, to kiss your pouting lips

How I wish you were near
When you are so far
How I wish you were close
When you’re even one heartbeat away
==================

beautiful reflections in melancholy verse
lovely in its imagery, sublte sensuality, and emotions.
very cool title and premise of the moons orbit to mark time.
well done poet Embers

In another life...I know I loved you then
Lightning strikes twice...we're destined again.
We dont have to make promises...we were always meant to be

Embers_Before_God
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4 posted 2001-04-15 01:22 PM


Thank you, Janet...The moon holds deep fascination for me...in all things--life, love, compassion...Embers

Dance with me under the moon. Touch my pale skin. Devour me. Love me.

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2001-04-15 01:38 PM


"Restless and weary are my heart and soul
When your perfume no longer lingers"

"How I wish you were close
When you’re even one heartbeat away"

Very nicely penned Embers ... longing, desire, yet with a subtle tenderness woven throughout, I very much enjoyed this piece!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2001-04-15 04:23 PM


Beautiful piece I enjoyed it.

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7 posted 2001-04-16 08:14 PM


Hi, this is very nice, full of longing, and I can relate so well to the heart of broken glass. Take care.
Sandra

Katherine Chandler
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since 2001-03-07
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8 posted 2001-04-16 11:08 PM


'Is the equation for lust,
Love plus desire'

A perfect definition, great poem, creative writing at its best. Embers You Rock!!!!  


Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

doreen peri
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9 posted 2001-04-16 11:18 PM


the last two lines are perfect......


Embers_Before_God
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10 posted 2001-04-17 12:56 PM


I thank you all once again for taking the time to comment...Too king and humbling...embers
Mabel A. Dilley
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11 posted 2001-04-17 03:46 PM


Other than the evident yearning, soon fulfilled is the fun of keeping time with the moon; for not so long ago mankind used the sun, moon and heavenly bodies to do exactly that. I now have a picture of my small wrist sporting a "moon watch." Oh, where does the mind go..?

"I am not now that which I have been."

Sunshine
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12 posted 2001-04-17 04:29 PM


Oh, ancient memories....this is wonderful...
PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
13 posted 2001-04-17 04:34 PM


This is so cool and haunting, much like your nom de plume...I like both.
Embers_Before_God
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14 posted 2001-04-17 11:44 PM


Julian, Sun and PK...thanks for your kind, encouraging words...Embers
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