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Toerag
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0 posted 2001-04-15 11:20 AM


Sitting in my motel room
Bored, not wanting to think,
Went downstairs to the watering hole,
And got myself a drink

Over across the bar-room
Where a young darling alone had sat,
Came two bulky gentleman,
(A nice way describing fat)

I finished my drink, began to leave,
The fat guys and lady then passed,
I walked over to the table where she had been,
Leaned over and touched her glass.

Later I saw her in the pool,
She didn't see me I'm sure,
I envied the water's ability
To totally cover her.

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 04-15-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-04-15 11:27 AM


Toe? Welcome home!...and, that's quite a thought!
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2 posted 2001-04-15 11:32 AM


If anybody could envy water, Toe, you could  

Welcome home and happy Easter!!

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-04-15 01:01 PM


LOL ... thanks for the *grins* Toerag!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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4 posted 2001-04-15 05:11 PM


Interesting how you segue the thoughts of water from the drinking glass to the pool. Neat writing.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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5 posted 2001-04-15 05:23 PM


Me too, loved the association of the water glass, the pool and your "um hum lust?"  Great story and wonderfully done  

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6 posted 2001-04-15 07:32 PM


Good!

[This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 04-15-2001).]

Corinne
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7 posted 2001-04-15 07:54 PM


I remember this, Toe.

A sweet one.

Cor

p.s. and I'm good, thanks, and you?

Nan
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8 posted 2001-04-16 09:22 AM


... and you didn't even mention sticking your toes in the water...
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9 posted 2001-04-16 05:34 PM


Ya think Nan would have erased the response I emailed to you? *EG* It sure is great to see your thoughts around here, Toe-man... and this is so gentle I can't even harass you for leering at the lady. *S* Great job!
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