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The Little Mermaid.......[caution: only for children and/or romantics....] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 The Little Mermaid Grandmother spoke in quiet tone, to her granddaughters, when alone of mystical, magical delights ~ surface people, away from sight in green and gold scaled sequined skin, young mermaids around her did swim, in hopes to hear her fantasies, in truth, sounded…as mysteries… "In your fifteenth year, you will find all sights to see that is mankind, a dry, great world, spirits run free but we can only watch, and see." Littlest mermaid, so entranced wanted so much, a given chance excitement increased, year by year to see dreams of mankind appear Atlantis had sunk, long ago statue of boy, her only show playing a flute, she would then gaze, dream of people in airy haze So when, after long years of wait she then flew up to ocean’s gate and saw a ship magnificent bewailed, ocean’s incalescent a goodsome Prince, toward ship’s stern slipped, then fell, and the ocean churned horrified, the young maid quickened before the Prince’s lungs thickened she rescued quick, young Prince’s form and in shadows, watched in the morn he was discovered, and revived her joy complete, he had survived in silent trow, she realized the Prince had captured much, a prize her heart was his, in dismal stress a comprehend, but no bequest deferred to deep, she then did go but in her mind, he stayed then, so she looked at her fish-form, dismayed, grieved for what she could not allay But the deeps held a witch of sea who would exchange, in chemistry young maiden’s tongue for her fresh soul as to deprive the tug of old but if maid lose to another winsome lass, why then, not bother for to sea foam she would return and with the seas, forever churn Little Mermaid, so deep in love nodded passive, her heart above bid her family, fond adieux then to the brink, with freedom flew she drank strong potion, then she felt the fins quickened, and two legs dwelt and on the shore, her form was found by the young Prince, whose heart now bound to wed another, the tales profound a Prince in love, in sorrow drowned, the mermaid, her heart sore, now wept, understood the vow she had kept in silence, she could not entreat the Prince, to avow her love sweet but silence, a darkness replete to his fiancé, nodded greet When ceremony came, she sought the winds of sea, for she had fought the gift the sea nymphs had given her a dagger, end Prince’s life’s stir but, when she held the dagger o’er his shadowed form, she cowered, so his love, for her, though incomplete twined in her heart, forevermore her love, so pure, left him, so sure in deepest sleep, she left his room and racing forth, into the sea, she threw dagger into sea’s bloom At that moment, her time had come but instead of change into sea foam she was carried, steady, aloft to do good deeds, to humans, soft. ‘Twas in the heart of mermaid, long that in blue seas would be love’s song Courtesy, Jim Warren Portraits [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 04-14-2001).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I guess I qualify. I loved your poem. Joyce |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Joyce...you fit both, as a romantic, and a young thing!....Thank you my friend! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ms. Sunshine  I do believe that this is a keeper! Well, I'm a hopeless romantic and don't tell anyone, but I sure do act like a child sometimes  yes, I loved it!~Take care, Melissa~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh this was simply flawless! I know you put a LOT of work into this one and I want to tell you that this mermaid lover appreciates it soooooooo much, I loved it! I hope you are making a Gramma's poetry book, I did, and I know that with the calibre of your work she/he will treasure it one day. Thank you for a fantastic read, hmmmmm I feel a mermaid thingee coming on!  ~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Romantic here. . . and you know that I loved this one. . . wonderful!! ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Embers_Before_God Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 101USA |
simply fantastic...Embers |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"in silent trow, she realized the Prince had captured much, a prize her heart was his, in dismal stress a comprehend, but no bequest" Bravo, Bravo!!! Magnificent tale Karilea! Wonderfully woven, in such excellent story-telling fashion. Your phrasing and flow were simply a treasure to read! Beautiful writing, I really enjoyed this!!! Best wishes and thank you for the "Happy Easter", hugs to you too my friend /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, how lovely, yes for children and romantics! Happy Easter, Sunshine! Kathleen Blake |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Melybee, what you said? I knew that! {~,^} Thank you! Mysteria, thank you for enjoying this with me! Yes, this one is "almost" right...thank you for noticing! Sven, you did? Not you...you don't have a romantic bone in your body....it must have been the child coming through!...LOL... Embers, thank you! Kit, I liked those lines too! Your enthusiasm over this leaves me grinning...and widely, I might add! Irish, happy Easter to you, too! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I qualify for both categories mentally and emotionally *L* and may I ditto Mysteria..this is very well done and your effort in this is evident.. this needs to be illustrated and put into a childrens book for your grandkids very cool inspire sun....... "in green and gold scaled sequined skin, young mermaids around her did swim, in hopes to hear her fantasies, in truth, sounded…as mysteries… "In your fifteenth year, you will find all sights to see that is mankind, a dry, great world, spirits run free but we can only watch, and see."    In another life...I know I loved you then |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Janet Marie, your shared illustrations have added so much! Thank you for reading this long write....it was so pleasant to craft... but the comments - Oh such a joy to read! |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Sweet enchanting Fairy Tail |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Craig, with that comment, I believe you crossed the board! Thank you! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm childish... does that count? How about hopeless romantic (emphasis on the hopeless? *G*) Let's just say... I read it anyway. phhhhhfffttt! *G* And loved it... this is superb! *S* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
What they said ... Wow! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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confetti Junior Member
since 2001-04-12
Posts 33 |
Awww! I loved your poem/story. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
I loved this Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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