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Caring Eyes - (A song I wrote, for you)
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Caring Eyes - (A song I wrote, for you) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“CARING EYES” by Bill Charles ~~~~ If I’m not the person you believe I am, but you discovered I were sincere, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If my whispered words to you are true, but you thought them not, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If I kissed your precious soft lips, and you felt the tenderness, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring… If I gave away my loving soul, and fragile heart, would you still look at me through your gentle eyes, with caring, If I were to look only at you, and speak softly into your ear, my loving words would be of sweetness, with my caring…., ‘when I surrender, only to you’… ~~~~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Mr Charles this is lovely. I would hate to think anyone would take advantage of one as sweet as you. I guess you'd be willing to sing it to her, also. and fragile heart" [This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 04-14-2001).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sounds like a sweet tune to me Bill *s It turned out beautiful...hope you caught a fish or two today.. . ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
never stop singing Bill. . . excellent. . .  --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
How could anyone resist such lovely music? Joyce |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Such a lovely tune! How could she resist? This is charming and well done! smiles, Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Taffetta Junior Member
since 2001-02-26
Posts 27 |
Bill Absolutely lovely and any woman would find it hard to resist it, especially if someone nice was singing it to her. |
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Carla New Member
since 2001-04-15
Posts 6 |
Hi Mr. Charles. I'm new here and so this will be my first post! This is a fine song, with the wistful refrain tugging at the heartstrings each time it is read. The first question sets the piece up (it's always good to have a little mystery, makes us want more.) The second question continues the theme, and by now I'm wondering if she will be wise to answer yes! Then in question three, I'm set up to be swept away past the possible darknesses by romance. Wonder if you want to include a "you" somewhere in Question 4, since obviously I wouldn't care to beam my gentle eyes on one who has given heart and soul to someone else! The close is very nice, and the poem continues to carry its hopeful, slightly sad mood. -Carla |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A lovely romantic verse Bill ... softly flowing with tender, loving sentiments. A wonderful read! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inot2B - please call me Bill or BC, but I appreciate the Mr. Thanks for the kind reply, and yes, I would be willing to sing it to her. nakdthoughts - yes, it is a sweet romantic tune, what else could I write, besides romance that is. Don't want a fish, just someone special. Sven - as long as this voice holds out, I'll keep singing, and thanks for coming by. Joyce - perhaps she hasn't, or perhaps she has. Apprecaiate the reply. KokoStewartKoomoa - resist, I'm not sure, but I love singing it, and also when I wrote it. Smiles also to you. Taffetta - well, I'm nice, at least I feel that I am, and as above loved writing it, and also now to sing. Thanks for your comments about this song. Carla - Bill or BC is fine. Welcome to Passions, you'll meet some of the greatest people in the world here, me included, haaa. I really like how you analyzed this writing, and please continue this with other writings of mine, if you so wish. I like your idea of a 'you' somewhere in #4, as I want to give to 'you' not to someone else. I will make that change. I thank you and do appreciate your responses. Kit - a lovely reply about this writing, and very appreciated. Thank you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If she loves you, she'll be nodding yes with every verse. *S* This is lovely, Bill! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
lovely words bill.... Lauren~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'If I were to look only at you, and speak softly into your ear, my loving words would be of sweetness, with my caring…., ‘when I surrender, only to you’' Beautiful verses, Bill! I absolutely love this! sp  to be with you... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - your words are touching, and sweet. Thank you very much. Greeneyes - thank you for coming by for this read. snowpants - I only wish that I could play this to all who replied, it did come out just beautiful. And, I so surprised myself with the music, I started to work on another, but I don't believe that it will come out as tender as this one. Thank you for the kindness of your reply. And I treasure your verse below: "to be with you... I've tried to hide my passion, but it's just no use... piece by piece I lose it when you walk into the room..." 'take my gentle hand, and no longer hide from passion... I accept, do not fear, tightly I hold you, not to lose, when we walk together, into the room....' BC |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This was indeed lovely Bill. There is a tenderness to your words. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This was very lovely and tender. Who could ask for more? All writing comes |
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