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Sven
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0 posted 2001-04-14 01:55 PM


I never knew love
until the first time you said
"I Love You" to me

I never knew joy
until the first time you said
"You make me happy"

I never knew smiles
until the first time you said
"You tickle me love"

I was not complete
until the first time you said
"You make me complete"

I was never me
until the first time you said
"Show yourself to me"

I never opened
until the first time you said
"Open your heart love"

I never had pride
until the first time you said
"I am proud of you"

And it all began
the very first time you said
"I love you" to me

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.


[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 04-14-2001).]

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1slick_lady
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1 posted 2001-04-14 02:12 PM


until the first time...........loved this........helen

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)       Shakespeare


Bill Charles
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2 posted 2001-04-14 02:44 PM


Sven - some of the most precious words you write.

BC

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3 posted 2001-04-14 03:10 PM


Three words that I will never tire of hearing.
"I love you"

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4 posted 2001-04-14 05:23 PM


Now, that was a GOOD start, huh?

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

[This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 04-14-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-14 05:52 PM


SVEN! A Senryu! [almost...lol...] as you need to remember, Mr. Editor..."syllables as they sound, even when apostrophed..." and that is one of the MOST difficult....

but the sentiment?  RIGHT on target!  THANK you for this!

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6 posted 2001-04-14 05:55 PM


Sven Pen, you're a sweetheart, yanno. Simply beautiful work.  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-04-15 01:35 PM


Beautiful sentiments Sven ... always wonderful to read the sweet words that come from your romantic mind, very nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-04-15 02:00 PM


lovely sentiments here
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9 posted 2001-04-15 02:09 PM


These are just gorgeous, Sven!  
Sven
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10 posted 2001-04-15 02:16 PM


helen, thank you my friend. . .  

Bill, thank you Sir. . . I try. . .

inot2B, me either. . . thank you. . .

Interloper, you bet!!  Thanks. . .

Sunshine, what??  Reminding me of the rules?  LOL   . . . well, thank you fellow editor. . . I have made the necessary changes. . .  

Temptress, I am??     Thank you. . .

Kit, thank you. . . I am glad that you liked this one. . .

Irish Rose, thank you. . .  

Elizabeth, thank you. . . and thanks for reading. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Alan
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11 posted 2001-04-15 02:37 PM


Wonderful senryu. Wonderful words to write about. I will never tire of those magical words

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12 posted 2001-04-15 02:59 PM



Yes, those are 3 very powerful, heart-altering words!  So lovely, Sven!  

Take care,
Melissa~

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13 posted 2001-04-15 03:33 PM


Those three words mixed with ageless magic are the most overpowering medicine for the soul ... they cure most anything and shine a gentle light over most solutions
Your words seem to say it all Sven

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14 posted 2001-04-15 05:17 PM


enjoy your read
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15 posted 2001-04-15 05:42 PM


Words of love can make all the difference in how we perceive ourselves. Sven, this is beautiful.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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16 posted 2001-04-15 06:02 PM


each verse  is like  a rose petal,sprinkled along the carpet    up to the bedroom door,,,aaaaaaaah
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17 posted 2001-04-15 06:30 PM


I love it when I can feel every word as if it were my own.

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

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18 posted 2001-04-15 10:40 PM


This evokes so much feeling, very romantic and special.
Sandra

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19 posted 2001-04-16 04:11 PM


Sven...elegant....well done. Bob
Sven
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20 posted 2001-04-16 06:21 PM


Alan, I don't think that any of us ever will. . . thank you. . .

Melissa, thank you my friend. . . I know that my heart has been altered more than once by those words. . .  

Rex, indeed they do my friend. . . what's that line??  "Love is all you need"?  It would seem so. . . thank you. . .

vandana, thank you my friend. . .  

Claire, thank you for always finding what's beneath. . .  . . . yes, it's amazing what a word of love from one you love can do. . .

helen, shhh!. . .  . . . you'll give away my secrets. . . lol. . . thank you so much. . .

JLR, it's always wonderful to know when my words can echo the words of another's heart. . . thank you. . .  

Sandra, thank you my friend. . . glad that you enjoyed. . .

Bob, thank you Sir. . .  

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21 posted 2001-04-18 12:02 PM


            


lovely from your pen....


Lauren~


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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



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22 posted 2001-04-18 02:45 AM


This is one of those great poems where I think to myself...."I wish I'd written that."

Great job, Sven.

Mike

[This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 04-18-2001).]

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23 posted 2001-04-19 03:25 PM


John,

I completely agree with R.J. (JLR)  I could have written these words myself.  Great poem my friend!

Take Care,
*Laura*

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24 posted 2001-04-19 04:06 PM


Wowish!  I LOVE this poem.. it's so beautiful.  It's almost like you were reading my thoughts.. wow. I like this a whole lot.  This is goin into my library!  VERY nicely done!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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