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You Were There, All Along
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You Were There, All Along |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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You Were There, All Along you are such a sneaky sprite, spiraling through my dreams at night holding up thoughts in candle’s light my Muse who thinks she’s always right you whisper words into my ear and make your intentions, oh, so clear! that you would have me pen, I fear, my deepest feelings that I hold so dear you care not what others might say you goad me on till you’ve had your way like a friend’s Randy Dragon, you won’t go ‘way in acquiescence, I must obey. would I damn you? no, I shan’t lest you leave me alone to rant but will you sing words I may recant? or leave me feeling lost and vacant? ah my Muse, you whisper and implore that I write yet one quiet verse more and as you hold up fast the light of dream you make it far easier than at first it seems I fear though, I shall never be a poet of renown but I know that because of thee I smile with the friends I’ve found. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful. . . absolutely wonderful. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice, Sunshine! You and your muse dance! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Yeppers ... your little sprite has brought us much delight. 'you are such a sneaky sprite, spiraling through my dreams at night holding up thoughts in candle’s light' Got me giggles in tow ... I know that little sprite !  Love to ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I loved all of this little gem - BUT ESPECIALLY: "you whisper words into my ear and make your intentions, oh, so clear! that you would have me pen, I fear, my deepest feelings that I hold so dear you care not what others might say you goad me on till you’ve had your way like a friend’s Randy Dragon, you won’t go ‘way in acquiescence, I must obey." I too am such a victim. You keep me smiling |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you are such a sneaky sprite, spiraling through my dreams at night holding up thoughts in candle’s light my Muse who thinks she’s always right you whisper words into my ear and make your intentions, oh, so clear! that you would have me pen, I fear, my deepest feelings that I hold so dear you care not what others might say you goad me on till you’ve had your way like a friend’s Randy Dragon, you won’t go ‘way in acquiescence, I must obey. ===================== Ahhhh yes....we all have a bit of Randy in us..and I have learned from a wise friend..this is a good thing  we all need to have that fire to inspire very cool poem sun ... as is your muse Every moment of every day |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunshine - this really caught me, and read it a couple of times. This verse I pondered over for a while, "I fear though, I shall never be a poet of renown", and thought the following words: I have read your writings, and from this amatuer can say that they are lovely, and very well done. Keep writing. BC |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Not renown? Surely you jest! You write better than the rest; We all search to find your name. You are in our Hall of Fame! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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