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Sami
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0 posted 2001-04-14 12:00 PM


The night has swallowed
Me, apparantly,
As I am
Surrounded  by darkness.
I cant even see
My hands
When I hold them
Inches from my face.
I cant hear
Myself when I
Yell for someone, anyone.
Thats when I notice
That it is quite cold here
In this darkness.
And the more I
Think about it,
The colder it gets.
I dont even recall
How I came to be
So alone.

'Sometimes we think it's holding on that makes us strong, but sometimes it's letting go' ~~Sam Ewing

© Copyright 2001 Samantha Masales - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-14 12:14 PM


Your not alone when you belong to Passions.
You have all of us here.
Bernie
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Bernie Slicker

RMW
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2 posted 2001-04-14 12:36 PM


Sami....Yes to what Bernie said. And also, a very nice poem.  Bob
Alan
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3 posted 2001-04-18 11:33 PM


Wonderful poem Sami....it is sad to feel that lonely
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4 posted 2001-04-19 12:59 PM


Sami,

Very introspective write.  If you truly are lonely, I suspect it won't last long, as there are many fine folks here at Passions.  Take care.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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5 posted 2001-04-22 09:41 PM


Sami~
You've followed the light to Passions hearth -
We'll warm ya' up with our friendship.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Tessa
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6 posted 2001-04-22 09:47 PM


I think the ending is my favorite part of this poem, simpily because you've captured how we often don't realize where we're heading until we're there.
Nice, Sami  

Bill Charles
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7 posted 2001-04-22 10:36 PM


Sami - my hand in friendship, I can feel the thoughts that you have written.

BC

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8 posted 2001-04-22 11:08 PM


Great symbolism!  I felt this.
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9 posted 2001-04-22 11:13 PM


I liked this too.  But I wonder, why you are so cold and alone.  Joyce
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10 posted 2001-04-22 11:15 PM


The cold and the darkness were tangible.  Reminds me of a night I spent camping...if I had put it into words as succinct as yours.

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

Sami
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11 posted 2001-04-22 11:48 PM


wow, thank you all for the nice comments!! i feel like i should explain this a little...i wrote it because an ex told me that im too scared to be alone...it made me angry that he said that so this is kind of a way to prove to him that i know what its like to be alone to me.....dont know, but i dont think i proved him wrong  
~Sami~

'Sometimes we think it's holding on that makes us strong, but sometimes it's letting go' ~~Sam Ewing

BloomingRose
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12 posted 2001-04-23 08:15 AM


Sami~ I think I have ventured into this sort of fear, in times past. It's not a pleasant place to be, but oh how much more do I love the light of day now!
Very well written!
Deb  

juanrodriguez
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13 posted 2001-04-23 02:21 PM


sami .......this is ur friend juan ,,,and just to let u know ....as long as im here ull never be alone
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