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helen smith
Member

since 2001-03-12

Posts 240

0 posted 2001-04-13 05:54 AM

You never know
That while you sleep
I write my poems across your back
I use both hands to colour in the
Secret parts I keep within
I criss and cross
I turn and toss
Unsettled
Nestled
Now at your feet
You wake and lift me up
And so
The day begins
And you
Never
Know

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-04-13 07:15 AM

Helen~
What sweet, loving thoughts.
Thank you for sharing a morning smile~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-04-13 10:00 AM

Well done! Write on!

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

3 posted 2001-04-13 10:01 AM

Very good. I like this.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-04-13 09:18 PM

I love this. . . now, if I just had a back to write them on. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Beckalini
Member

since 2001-01-02

Posts 151
Yorkshire, England

5 posted 2001-04-13 09:22 PM

Absolutely adorable!

~Becky~

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

6 posted 2001-04-13 10:54 PM

Helen,

I liked the feel of this one and the movement was so nice. Thanks for sharing.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

7 posted 2001-04-13 11:14 PM

Hmmm . . .
moody, mysterious, interesting . . .
I like 'em this way, h.s.

Krawdad
/:-}==
=#===

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

8 posted 2001-04-13 11:46 PM

I'm not sure if this is passionate or sad...either way I found many ways to relate.

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

9 posted 2001-04-14 12:20 PM

Wow Helen,
The first post of my poem was about 8am but needed to edit it... While i was watchining my wife sleep, and writing my poem you were posting your poem... wow how minds work.. but you did post yours first.. I didn't even realize it though till mid afternoon.... amazing the sleep thing..lol

Great write.
Bernie
A smile a day keeps the world in

's.

Bernie Slicker

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

10 posted 2001-04-19 09:32 PM

I write my poems across your back
I like this very much...so nice thinking. reality...~Wasi~

I love to nice poetry.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

11 posted 2001-04-24 10:55 PM

your poems have a tender feel to them...going to search for more

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

12 posted 2001-05-23 04:07 PM

" You never know
That while you sleep "

realy i don't know
nice work and thinking

that is my first comment to any member of piptalk.

latin passion
Senior Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

13 posted 2001-05-23 07:43 PM

writing love letters across the back. Nice.

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