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If Stars Could Weep
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If Stars Could Weep |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea 
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If Stars Could Weep by Michael If stars could weep, they would shower tears of sparkling fire to rain upon the earth and steal the night. No more does eve contain the satin solitude of peace. Just empty moments filled with darkness, crippled thoughts. A purgatory ’til the day is born. Wrapped in ghostly cloak of singing crickets and Mockingbird songs, I stroll within the damp stillness in search of solace. Heavy is the scent of wetted earth and flowered branch. Spring has torn the world from winter’s icy crypt. On the horizon are scarlet fingertips, timidly touching, like a virgin, and then with more experience and courage, pushing back the night. I throw off the cloak and breathe in the coming dawn. Proust- |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
If stars could weep, they would shed a few tears over this beauty. I loved the images this brings along with it. Excellent pen you possess  ~Becky~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 Michael~What splendid beauty in this penning. 'On the horizon are scarlet fingertips, timidly touching, like a virgin, and then with more experience and courage, pushing back the night. I throw off the cloak and breathe in the coming dawn.' Just doesn't get much prettier than this imagery ! *Applause* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If stars could weep, they would shower tears of sparkling fire to rain upon the earth and steal the night. No more does eve contain the satin solitude of peace. ======================= Spring has torn the world from winter’s icy crypt. On the horizon are scarlet fingertips, timidly touching, like a virgin, and then with more experience and courage, pushing back the night. I throw off the cloak and breathe in the coming dawn. ================ this is awesome... stunning imagery, wonderful vocab and poetic phrases...ethereal and elemental, written with a perfect melding of dark and light,pain and promise very very cool poem poet sir!! baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael--This is one of my favorites of yours...so beautiful in intent and written with just the perfect word choice...and the end lifted my spirit. Superb writing, my friend! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I loved this , reaches out to you, I imagine the night with sparks flying down to the ground from the stars, loved the imagery. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Excellent images and hope in this!~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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elizabeth anne Member
since 2001-03-29
Posts 83 |
I can see the sunrise, feel the breeze, smell the aroma of Spring all from your lovely words..very nice Michael! Elizabeth Anne |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am speechless. ~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Simply beautiful work here, Michael. The images are superb. All writing comes |
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elizabeth anne Member
since 2001-03-29
Posts 83 |
So lovely, I just had to stop back by to read again...by the way...did you get my email? Elizabeth Anne |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Michael, this is so lovely. I can see it all. Your images are superb.  Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is simply amazing....thank you! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Fantastic! What a luscious write of the rite of spring! Bombarding the senses almost as spring itself. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Becky, Hi again. :-) You're very kind and I do appreciate your good words. Thank you. Janet, Thanks for the "awesome." :-) I'm glad you came by and read this one. It was one of those poems that I didn't know was in me until I started to write. Does that ever happen to you? Martie, Thank you for the "superb" and for this becoming one of your favorites. :-) Rosebud, It's interesting sometimes how the imagery grows in a poem. "If stars could weep" popped into my head. I wrote it down and then for the next fifteen or twenty minutes just looked at it, thinking "Now what?" Somehow it grew into what you now see. Thank you. Melissa, I have to tell you, that I love getting a "wow" now and then. Thanks. :-) Elizabeth Anne, It's good to see you again. Thank you for the nice words. Mysteria, "speechless"...I've always found that response to something I've written, such a nice compliment. Thank you. :-) Lone Wolf, Thank you for liking this. It's a bit different from my usual writing and I wasn't sure how it would be received. :-) Elizabeth Anne, I haven't received your e-mail yet. Perhaps you should send it again, okay? Dee, Thank you, sweetheart. I love having you read and enjoy my poetry. :-) Karilea, Such a smile you've given me with so few words. Thank you. :-) Virginia, It's good seeing you here. Thanks for liking this. :-) Proust- |
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