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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2001-04-17 04:57 PM


(Once again with the anon muse's assistance - Muse in italiics)

The Club - nearly deserted
         seemingly so
The ceiling smoky still
         a hazy glow
The drummer’s snares
         left a whiskey beat
The bass still in time
         left notes replete
As the sax quietly
         in the bluesy night
Wailed plaintive notes
               tugging heartstrings
On the whiskey-soaked night
               all ghosts out of sight

He’d remained for the sounds
               memories did abound
Backing horn on the keys
               For a few still pleased

She’d stopped for the phone
               He watched her fiddle her keys
As she sought some coffee
               Smiled at her  knees
To get back on the road
               He noted too: eyes flecked with gold

As he poured her a cup
          she peered over the brim
She wondered then
          how it would be
If all night she’d be up
          Is this chemistry
Yet the wail of the horn then
         brought her up short
And the blue of his eyes
          yes, the trip she'd abort



The first duty of love is to listen.

               ~ Paul Tillich ~

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-04-17 05:16 PM


I would hesitate to guess, nah,...you and your muse?  You are both having way too much fun with one pen, there!

What a write!

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2 posted 2001-04-18 12:42 PM


  a pleasure dear friend.....


Lauren~


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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



Panne447
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3 posted 2001-04-18 02:08 AM


Very nice, Wil.  Felt I was there, heard all, saw all, felt red-faced and turned and got in my car- I hate missed opportunities.   Panne

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Fee
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4 posted 2001-04-18 04:43 AM


Nothing can say it better
than a good jazz band.... :-)

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

gremlin
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5 posted 2001-04-18 06:15 AM


seems like there are two poems one in regular font another in italic.

very original.

Stan

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6 posted 2001-04-18 10:11 AM


Ah, yes......the surroundings are so very familiar......
Wonderful depiction of a most popular hangout, complete with sexy bartender, and blues in the background!!  Enjoyed, as I always do with you!!!!  

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!
  
    


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7 posted 2001-04-18 10:27 AM


Good to see your words again Bill.  Enjoyed this much.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Martie
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8 posted 2001-04-18 11:26 AM


Bill--The music and romance sounds like a perfect evening...enjoyed you, and your muse.
Gemini
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9 posted 2001-04-18 02:25 PM


Wilfred, I enjoyed sitting in full view of this club and "felt" its surroundings.  Thank you for this write.
Corinne
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10 posted 2001-04-18 08:17 PM


What a surprise ending this has!

Great portrait - was right there in this picture!

Corinne

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11 posted 2001-04-18 09:05 PM


Mmm..Have I ever told you, sir, that you write very well? I enjoyed every word.  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

Paula Finn
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missouri
12 posted 2001-04-18 11:23 PM


This is a wonderful song and a beautiful dance...play on dear poet
Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2001-04-19 09:07 PM


thank you all - assuming my muse cooperates - I hope we'll be back to play another set
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