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Sea Dreams.....(rictameter)
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Sea Dreams.....(rictameter) |
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SEA 
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Sea dreams Remembering breezes caress my soul crashing waves in surf call my name soft fog lingers…… like a ghost from my heart soothing with gentle rhythmic sway knowing my need for this Remembering Sea dreams ~SEA~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is so pretty....but check your count, dear.... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
so soothing...beautiful....helen "...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Lovely images, calming and beautiful. If indeed these words refer to yourself, what a wonderful person you are indeed! *smiles* enjoyed! -Tier |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ where am I off?! I counted.......(help!)  Helen~ thank you Tier~ I love the ocean....just missing it but thank you ~SEA [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 04-11-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Beautiful as usual SEA,, and the only time the count was off is when i read it in my native tongue. ( appalaciaese-- in which re/mem/ber/ing becomes re-mem-brin....lol good job There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you Jamie SEA |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
what a coincidence! I have SEA dreams myself!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sea ~ you do the sea well! Enjoyed! |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
I don't know where the count is off.. but i do like the verse you have wrote here. "crashing waves in surf call my name" really like this line, of course Sea Dreams coming from you Sea is very nice tooooooo. May your dreams of your sea continue to call your name. Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in 's.here is an extra smile for this poem .Bernie Slicker |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i have dreams myself.... of a "blissful by the sea".... it's hard to describe but i tried before...... in another poem sounds DREAMY....y'know? like you're longing for something you don't have.... or a memory of something you can't quite remember??...it's a BEAUTIFUL write....nice lines in here, my friend!! i SEA you are working on various styles of writing and it's wonderful........... oh... i'm back to edit btw... what the heck is a "rictameter" or if i spelled it wrong, sorry... just wondering... never heard of that [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 04-12-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
really cool |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
SEA, I really like this one... evokes a nice image. except when Balladeer, started taking about his wet dreams in public. Oh yes and I can't find a problem with the count either but.... I think you are supposed to start with a two syllable word and end with the same two syllable word. Parker |
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