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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2001-04-11 01:56 AM

Yesterday it was quite hot,
But today rain decide to stop,
It flooded my thoughts with,
The smell of sweet earth,

But others could care less,
For what’s it worth,

I let them not strangle my anticipation for more rain,
Sure sun is nice,
But here it hardly rains,

The cold wind signals some hope,
For others it is another day,
Full of recourse.

Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.)

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2001-04-11 02:00 AM

Cool poem. I live in PHX AZ so I understand completely!

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-04-11 02:25 AM

Oh, Xeonox. I love the rain, but I love the sun too and I hope we get some for Easter. I would think everyone would welcome rain in California. But I live in Washington state and this year they say we need more. Hardly seems possible. Love, Joyce

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

3 posted 2001-04-11 11:08 AM

enjoy

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-04-11 11:17 AM

Xeonex, great piece, yes Fullerton does need the joy of rain, just as wetter areas during these drought-like conditions of late. Oregon and Washington have had much less precipitation than normal and though I'm in the desert like part of Oregon, where rain is always less than the Willamette Valley, I'm truly enjoying the rain we're getting.

I feel compelled to mention that the two lines at the end of the third stanza, IMHO, need a little tweaking. The remainder of the piece does seem to be in a poetic form, yet these two lines or more in prose. Perhaps it was your intention to draw attention to those lines, especially, by making a departure from your established form, if so, your right, of course. If not, I hope my remark has been a helpful one. I do like the poem and its statement!

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

5 posted 2001-04-12 03:08 AM

I was inspired by this poem while at work.

Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.)

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