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fish story |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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line cast across the miles- a nibble of interest and i was hooked though powerless over your expertise i struggled for a time trying to maintain my freedom yet the further i moved from side to side the closer i came to you slowly...certainly you reeled me in all the while earning my trust- allowing me to become comfortable in your care finally... i came within reach and you grasped me gently yet firmly in your hands- you held on tight and i was safe in your secure embrace everyone was happy there were cheers and congratulations and you were so proud to call me your own it was no secret- you shouted it loudly for all to hear the dance floor was ours and soon i grew accustomed to you- content to be your prize and then... as the music stopped and the people watched you gently removed the hook and threw me back -vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Awesome ending. Just such a powerful write. I wonder why hasn't anyone replied to such a beautiful poem. Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hello Sweet Vicky~ Ahhhhh ! Now I can smile  SHE'S BACK ! And she's a KEEPER ! *Hugging* you in sheer delight !  Good to see you, gal ! Great re-entry ! Do it again ! ! Still waiting on that call ! Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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painted lady Junior Member
since 2001-04-01
Posts 48on the wing or nectaring |
Fun read! I smelled something fishy about where this was going, right from the start. But "catch and release"? Now that's taking the idea a little to far! pl And then my heart with pleasure fills, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Xeonox- thanks so much for the enthusiastic reply...  really glad you enjoyed this one.. Marge...my friend- it feels soooo good to post again... thanks so much for the warm welcome back i feel right at home again... glad you enjoyed this one... love and hugs... painted lady- something fishy, huh? thanks for the kind reply... so glad you enjoyed it.. hugs, vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I enjoyed this. You reeled us all in. Joyce |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh Wow!! this is good...and it's so nice to see you back here.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Welcome back Vicky ... so nice to see you here again... hope your here for more than a visit. great poem that far too many of us can relate to. baby, dont you work so hard for this prize you found ... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
TRICKS....  so good to have you back...i knew if i posted one you'd have to come back too...lol...i like this one tricks..it saddens me a bit..but a good write all the same i hope to see each other more often in pip.. we've been away too long....hugs, g time makes us bolder..even children get older..and i'm gettin' older too... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Enjoyed this very much, excellent story telling complete with surprise ending! enjoyed! -Tier |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the throwing back is so you can grow for the next time he catches you.....or someone else...... Vicky, I loved this!! SEA |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Hey! I almost missed this! It's great to see your name here again! Very nice re-entry here. It's not a bad thing to be the one that got away, you know? To love another person is to see the face of God. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Boy did you hook me. My mind was really going strong. First worried then thrilled it was working out for you. Then laughing as removed the hook and threw me back" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Joyce- thanks so much! really glad you enjoyed this... Sharon- thanks so much for the warm welcome... i'm so happy you enjoyed this one...that means alot coming from you.. Janet- thanks so much...it's great to be back! i missed this place soooo much. glad you enjoyed this one.. dg- hey there buddy...pal.... yes...it has been way to long, but isn't it great to be back? glad you liked this one...it was not intended to sadden... love and hugs to you... Tier- thanks so much for the enthusiastic response...it really means alot to me.. so glad you enjoyed the read.. SEA- ahhh yes...you are so right... thanks so much for the kind words.. glad you like it.. Marilyn- so good to see your name on a reply as well.. i've certainly missedeveryone here. glad you liked this little fish story.. i must admit, however, that sometimes i wish i hadn't gotten away...LOL. hugs to you.. inot2B- wow...thanks so much...you've made my night! i'm so glad to hear that this one hooked you...so to speak...LOL. glad you enjoyed it.. thanks again all, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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