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If the Inside You...
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If the Inside You... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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If the Inside You... If you could show me...what's in your heart If your words you write...could one day say If the inside you...could outside me All my fears would slip away. If your held back smiles...would touch my lips If your eyes in stare...would center mine If the inside you...could outside me All my loving, would yours combine. If I say it once...or maybe more If expressed in words... my heart's delight If my inside me...could outside you All my moments would reunite Into a world, together bound Linked, connected, in your expound. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
If my inside me...could outside you Oh yes...this is a cool line, and i loved it repeated for emphasis. The last 2 lines forced the point home. Great job. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you, Poetic Knight, Sir..have been in a holding pattern of exhaustion and dismay lately...but your words always life me up  ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You KNOW I'm liking this one! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sighhhhhh...well I am GLAD you are liking this  Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
cool concept - great poem - I want to 'play' with it - i believe you've offered some inspiration |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you are welcome to play anytime, Bill Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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