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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-04-10 12:41 PM

I stand here sadly,
alone and bereft
knowing there are no saving words left

I cannot speak out
to say your name
words die like embers after the flame.

It was,
from the start,
meant to be.
No one like you
could ever love me.

You claim it was I
that caused this rift
casually allowing our love to drift.

My lack of commitment,
unwillingness to share
was the reason, you said, you began not to care.

Silently, forlornly,
unable to speak
you slide out of my life, truer love to seek.

You said it was me,
right from the start,
I say it was you that broke my heart.

The only thing
on which we agree
is once
I loved you
and once
you loved me.

VAS
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Oregon

1 posted 2001-04-10 12:43 PM

Sad and very hard when relationships end.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2001-04-10 12:48 PM

There are so many that would be able to identify with your poem.
          "I cannot speak out
           to say your name
words die like embers after the flame."
So sad, when words are empty and can no longer repair or heal.  Great poem!  Well done!

~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-04-10 12:49 PM

PoetdeVine~
Such a melancholy little piece ...
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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painted lady
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on the wing or nectaring

4 posted 2001-04-10 12:49 PM

"no saving words...cannot speak...words die...silently...unable to speak..."

The poet's curse?

pl

And then my heart with pleasure fills,
And dances with the daffodils. Wm Wordsworth (I Wondered Lonely as a Cloud)

insect
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since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

5 posted 2001-04-10 01:04 AM

Sad write!
Enjoyed the read.

Auguste

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By the sea

6 posted 2001-04-10 03:48 AM

So very sad. Please tell me it's just a story and not the truth. (((hugs))) to you dear poet.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2001-04-10 06:11 AM

I suppose this poem speaks of two not falling in love at exactly the same time and degree and so sadly one moves on not giving love the time to develop and grow...James

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

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Australia

8 posted 2001-04-10 06:16 AM

Oh PdV
This is sad and sometimes how love ends, tearfully and sadly one blaming the other for something they both have caused sometimes unknowingly.....great write
~HUGS~
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Nan

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9 posted 2001-04-10 07:18 AM

Very well done, PdV..."The only thing upon which we agree..."... That line is probably true of nearly every lost love in existance... 'Tis a melancholy but magnificent piece, my friend...

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-04-10 07:34 AM

How sad, Sharon!

Waseem Cheema
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Pakistan

11 posted 2001-04-10 08:42 AM

May you meet with her soon and you stand there Happily.

I love to nice poetry.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

12 posted 2001-04-10 08:42 AM

Sharon...how sad, but yet how beautifully written. I have missed you and your work my friend

~ Ruth
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JLR
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13 posted 2001-04-10 09:36 AM

knowing there are no saving words left...

The only thing
on which we agree
is once
I loved you
and once
you loved me.

It's much too early for me to be crying but the day starts as it does. How does love become not? I don't know but sometimes it does.

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

14 posted 2001-04-10 09:56 AM

Thank you all for your kind replies.

This is a repost I think...so it's not really about me at this point in my life. One must BE in a relationship to know the pain of losing it.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

15 posted 2001-04-10 01:04 PM

heartfelt and tender deVine. . .

excellent. . .

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LoveBug

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16 posted 2001-04-10 03:46 PM

Sharon, this is such a sad piece... but it's very well-written. You are truely the devine poet!!! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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