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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2001-04-09 11:51 PM


Our hands touch, dirt covered
Then our eyes meet, sweat dripping
The world goes away in that look

You offer your mouth, lemonade taste
We lay back in the grass, clover scented
And dream under a summer sky

Tools pushed aside, flowers forgotten
One lone rose petal, delicately used
The birds rejoice with us

Summer breezes on our bodies, soft caress
Sunset blazes across the sky, sailors delight
Theres always tomorrow...to plant this garden

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RMW
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1 posted 2001-04-09 11:53 PM


Paula..."..there's always tomorrow...to plant this garden..." Excellent...and very wise. Bob
JLR
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2 posted 2001-04-10 09:07 AM


But tomorrow you may remember today and that garden may never get planted.  Well, there's always the produce department!

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

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3 posted 2001-04-10 09:20 AM


What a great way to not plant the garden!   Paula, this is wonderful!    SEA
Packratmike
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4 posted 2001-04-10 11:20 AM


Paula...I love the way you constructed this throughout in sort of a thought, after-thought way.  The picture painted, the word flow, a unique consistant meter of its own.....everything is perfect!

Well crafted and a very, very nice read.

Mike

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5 posted 2001-04-12 02:58 PM


Makes me want to rush right out and find some...flowers yeah thats is LOL
JamesMichael
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6 posted 2001-04-12 05:10 PM


Paula this poem really creates nice images and thoughts....James
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7 posted 2001-04-12 05:11 PM


I wondered why I like gardening so much. Joyce
Joe Houck
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8 posted 2001-04-30 12:47 PM


This poem really puts you in the feelings of the writer.  must have been in a good mood when you wrote this. =)

"Tools pushed aside, flowers forgotten
One lone rose petal, delicately used"

So romantic!

*JOE*


Paula Finn
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9 posted 2001-05-01 01:00 AM


Bob...thats what tomorrows are for...thanks darlin

JLR...lol so we just get dirty again...and again...and again...hehehe

Mike...you flatter me sir...and I thank you for that

fnbj...go for it LOL

James...thanks you sweet poetfriend...you know I value your words

Joyce...LOL yeah me too

Joe...I was in a mood alright LOL...thank you sweetie...Im glad you found this romantic

ethome
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10 posted 2001-05-01 05:05 PM


What did ya do after that huh? c'mon huh what?  This piece sure has some great images Paula.......I could see me there and I was looking around for you. Where were you?  You were hiding in the tall grass weren't ya? I'll find ya, there's no escaping...do I have to help with the garden the next day?......aw! I do!  Oh well that's the price ya pay ain't it?
Wilfred Yeats
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11 posted 2001-05-02 10:41 AM


gardening never sounded more delightful
Paula Finn
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12 posted 2001-05-03 04:15 AM


ethome...you lil devil you heheh...Im not hiding too hard...look around a little...see? And of course you have to help...how else will we NEVER get this planted?

Bill...then come dig with me....maybe we will find some worms and we can go......fish

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