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Sven
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0 posted 2001-04-08 03:42 PM


*thanks for Paula Finn for the phrase*  

you've walked in my dreams
for almost as long as I've
known what love was
filling my mind
and touching my soul
with your beautiful spirit

for so long
I never believed that you existed
that you would always only
be in my dreams
never to be seen
          never to be fulfilled
                   never to be loved

and now,
standing on the outside of the door
to your heart
I pace and pace
finally, taking a deep breath
I knock and the door opens
to reveal my dream come true

but, my dreams fell short
of the real you

for you
surpassed them all

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 2001-04-08 04:18 PM


I like this a lot, Sven... It reminds me a lot of a scene in The Firm where he thinks he's probably screwed his marriage up beyond repair... and she tells him that long before she knew him, she loved a promise of him... and he's kept that promise. *S* Beautiful!
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2 posted 2001-04-08 04:42 PM


Sven, I think you have begun to heal.  Life is going on.  Thank you for sharing.  Hugs,
  ME

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3 posted 2001-04-08 04:59 PM


When the reality of love surpasses the dream...it is ever any better than that?

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

Sven
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4 posted 2001-04-09 07:26 PM


suthern, thank you. . . I'm glad that you enjoyed. . .  

ME, you're welcome. . .and perhaps you're right about the healing. . .

JLR, no it's not my friend. . .thank you. . .  

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5 posted 2001-04-10 08:55 PM


beautiful sven....


Greeneyes~


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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



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6 posted 2001-04-10 08:58 PM


Very romantic, sounds like the object of your affection is a lucky one.  )
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7 posted 2001-04-11 11:29 AM


like this a lot
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8 posted 2001-04-11 12:24 PM


So soft and tender are your words written on screen which touch my heart endlessly and what you have penned here in this poem is truly beautiful just thought I'd let ya know...

I enjoyed reading this PoetFriendSven...
Hugs2u
~coco~

Sven
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9 posted 2001-04-11 12:50 PM


Greeneyes, thank you. . .

Nicolette, thank you and welcome!!  Now, if you could just let whoever the object of my affection is know this. . . then I'll be happy!!  LOL

vanadana, thank you my friend. . .  

PoetFriend Coco, thank you for letting me know. . . and HUGS to you to my wonderful PoetFriend. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2001-04-11 01:01 PM


Hey Sven this wil get you everwhere, nice write.
walker
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11 posted 2001-04-11 02:03 PM


Enjoy!
Sunshine
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12 posted 2001-04-11 02:10 PM


Yes....what Sy said....this will get you everywhere....
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13 posted 2001-04-11 06:40 PM


Very nice thoughts, Sven, and beautifully worded.
Sandra

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