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0 posted 2001-04-08 02:23 PM


Poetic Worlds

by Michael


The troubled poet works at rhyme
Of fantasies he wished were true
So trapped within his present life
There's nothing else that he can do

That eyes could gaze upon his own
And find in them all that he is
Then deeply cherish what they see
Would give him so much happiness

But only in dreams can this be
Just rhyming words to get him by
He lives a life of fantasy
Poetic worlds that are a lie

How in these worlds he's treasured so
By loveliness with tender heart
A hand to hold beneath the stars
And of each day to be a part

A cold bath is reality
The contrast often hard to bear
He'd rather live within his poems
For life it seems is too unfair

So in the darkness yet again
Another world does he create
And there her hand to hold once more
Beneath the stars and contemplate

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

© Copyright 2001 Michael Auguste - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
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1 posted 2001-04-08 03:11 PM


very insightful...
i don't know if i'd wanna live in a couple of my poems... they are my darkest parts...

but i know exactly what ya mean. they're still an escape.  

well thought out write...

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2 posted 2001-04-08 03:31 PM


Yes!

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3 posted 2001-04-08 04:50 PM


Oh, Michael~
This is so poignantly endearing.

Not all poets live in a fantasy world - but surely some do ...

How wonderful to have a safe haven of happiness to retreat to when things in the outside world aren't as kind as we'd like them to be.

May your 'contemplate' bring us many more beauties to touch us ...
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~



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4 posted 2001-04-08 04:51 PM


I liked this but it is sad.  I am hoping you find someone in the real world to capture your poet's heart.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2001-04-08 05:10 PM


Michael--
Indeed,
a poet can create a world sweet,
within a verse capture complete,
but life is not just flowers blooming,
in it there is also glooming
but it is worth every breath,
to be around to see the rest.

Excuse my silly little rhyme.
You always write so well, Michael, and this is no exceptiong...hugs!

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6 posted 2001-04-08 05:13 PM


Michael, I don't know how you do it, but you always have such a perfect way of saying just what I feel at the moment!! Bravo!!!!

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!
  
    


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7 posted 2001-04-08 06:06 PM


Michael,
So sad were your words and I guess most of us who write see it as an escape from the real world but also a way to show others our innermost thoughts which sometimes even our closest friends don't see.  I know some of what I write is fantasy but I know one thing for sure, whether or not you were a writer, you would still be a very sincere and special person.....I have no doubt about that!
Take care my friend.........Sue

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8 posted 2001-04-08 06:31 PM


Michael:  Very nice.  I think we reveal our true selves with our poetry whether we write from real life or imagination. Or both.  Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (edited 04-08-2001).]

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9 posted 2001-04-08 07:50 PM


Michael,

This really displays your talent and imagination! Well done..

Elizabeth Anne

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10 posted 2001-04-08 10:25 PM


Many times the words we write reveal our heart's.  Sometimes it's reality and other times just a touch of fantasy.  You just never know how it will all come out.  Great writing.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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11 posted 2001-04-09 01:52 AM


Ethan,
Yes, and escape.  Poetry has always been like a form of therapy to me.  Thank you.

Karilea,
Thank you.  Thank you also for reading this piece.

Marge,
It's true that I sometimes retreat into my poetry.  It would be my guess that many of us do.  Thank you, my friend.

Trillium,
Thank you for finding the time to read this.

Martie,
Thank you for the nice compliment, my friend.  You're very sweet. (((hugs)))

Sunny,
I love it when I see your post on one of my poems.  It's always such a nice surprise.  Be checking your mail.  Take care, good friend and thank you.

Sue,
Yes, an escape and a way of sharing our innermost thoughts.  I am a very sincere person, but I don't see myself as special in anyway.  Still, it's nice to hear.  Thank you, sweet friend.

Lone Wolf,
Yes, sometimes reality and at other times, fantasy.  Even so, it is true that our hearts are much exposed in everything we write.  Thank you.

Joyce,
I think we reveal much of our true selves, because poetry is an honest art form.  Thank you for reading this piece.

Elizabeth Anne,
Thank you for the "well done" and for liking this one.


Thank you, all!
Michael


    
  

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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12 posted 2001-04-10 09:02 PM


~sigh~ so beautiful Michael....to be able to escape from reality, we all need to do it every now and then....you say your words beautifully...   


Greeneyes~


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Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
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13 posted 2001-04-10 09:06 PM


Poets may well live in their dreams, but perhaps it is a way of surviving the rough and chaffing tides of ordinary life. Very insightful, indeed.  )
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14 posted 2001-04-11 05:11 PM


Lauren and Nicolette,

Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read this.  Yes, sometimes it's nice to escape into a life that we have some control in shaping.  Still, it's only fantasy and real life is so much better, isn't it?  Take care.  

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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