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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-04-08 10:59 AM


Rewrite:

             Forever
                                                                                                      My steps weary, a little slow,
Much slower now then years ago.
And the stay of memories weigh,
Heavier now then yesterday.

Each step strains a little more,
More so now then years before.
As sands depletion takes its toll
Horizonless beyond my goal.

There is no crest this weary road,
Each night of rest just adds more load.
We look surcease and beg release,
But peace does not include our lease.

We all must journey into time,
By different road, route and climb.
But if a love opens a door,
Then hold it tight and say no more.

Our faith is blind a chart less chart
Invisible its end and start.
A ghost of being, a host of goal,
Perhaps a process of the soul?

But if by chance I am in error,
Then love your love as if forever.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 04-08-2001).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2001-04-08 11:18 AM


Sy--There is much wisdom in your years..

Our faith is blind a chart less chart
Invisible its end and start.
A ghost of being, a host of goal,
Perhaps a process of the soul?

I particularly liked the above stanza...and thanks for the unique person that you are...and for writing it down in your unique way.  It's great!

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2 posted 2001-04-08 11:52 AM


I sincerely hope this is only a work of art and not a work of belief.  Either way, well done.

Time has its reward, we just have to wait ...

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-04-08 01:53 PM


Martie,
The uniqueness is yours. *L*

Interloper,
Just a poem, thank you for the read and comment.

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-04-08 02:43 PM


We all must journey into time,
By different road, route and climb.
But if a love opens a door,
Then hold it tight and say no more.

Our faith is blind a chart less chart
Invisible its end and start.
A ghost of being, a host of goal,
Perhaps a process of the soul?

But if by chance I am in error,
Then love your love as if forever.
============================

me thinks you dont make "errors" when you write from your poetic soul ...
and I was gonna fuss about the begining of this poem...
cuz ya were walking a fine line on our "old" joke agreement   ...
BUT those last verses are so cool and so spiritually kissed with wisdom....
that I cant say nothing but ...
OHHOWILOVEWHENYOUWRITELIKETHIS  
*WW*   me

Looking hard into your eyes,
There was nobody I'd ever known.
Such an empty surprise ...
To feel so alone.
~jackson browne~

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-08-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-08 03:37 PM


and I would give you dreams to dream
that your spirit in endless float, serene
before the weight of daily goal
anchored you a cumbersome soul...

Hugs....

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6 posted 2001-04-08 03:54 PM


superb Sir. . . as always. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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7 posted 2001-04-08 04:48 PM


This is so well written and certainly gives one food for thought.

Betty Lou Hebert

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2001-04-08 09:33 PM


JM,
AndohhowIlovewhenyouwritelikethis.
Winkiewinkie.

Sunshine,
And I love you too. *L*

Sven,
Thank you my friend.

Trillium,
And thank you too.


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9 posted 2001-04-11 04:27 PM


We all must journey into time,
By different road, route and climb.
But if a love opens a door,
Then hold it tight and say no more.

I especially like this verse, Seymour... now if only I could find that door! *S* Great work!

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2001-04-11 09:06 PM


Suthern,
Some how some way you will. *L*

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