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Doug Pretorius
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0 posted 2001-04-08 09:51 AM


Things Hidden In Light
February 27, 2001
Copyright 2001 Doug Pretorius

sometimes I feel as though
your face is shrouded by moonlight
and hidden by the sun
though standing unquestioned that light
should reveal where shadows cast
when questioned and asked and sought
the truth is ne'er unveiled so fast
the truth is as the truth may be
unknown to earthling man
for his eyes see nothing of reality
the learned of us teach and taught
though important questions are
rarely asked and never answered
I look into the sky, this clouded night
and I'm not surprised to see things
more clearly, more readily than in light
for now I see not by my gaze
not by the wash of suns rays
rather by heart and mind and soul
yet to distinguish and let truth be known
still I am not wise enough
nor believe I shall ever be
because I as you, we are sand and dust
laid upon this earth to ask
even if we shall never know

© Copyright 2001 Doug Pretorius - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-04-08 10:22 AM


Welcome to Passions! An enjoyable first read, and I look forward to many more from your pen!  Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Poet deVine
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2 posted 2001-04-08 10:31 AM


Welcome to the family! I look forward to reading more from you.    
Butterflies_dont_cry
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3 posted 2001-04-08 10:54 AM


Welcome to Passions...your entrance into
Passions was a grand one...Fantastic
work..may you enjoy the forums and the
people here~

Red-uni
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4 posted 2001-04-08 11:20 AM


Great way to start out in Passions.  Very well written, enjoyed the read.   Red
Honeybee
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5 posted 2001-04-08 11:25 AM



  Doug!~

An excellent entrance with this poem into our family, you'll love it here!  

Take care,
Melissa~

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6 posted 2001-04-08 01:02 PM


Doug~
Welcome to the greatest family of poets on the Internet !
The family circle grows with you ...
You're gonna like it here !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Martie
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7 posted 2001-04-08 01:16 PM


Welcome to Passions, Doug...I know you will enjoy it here.
Corinne
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8 posted 2001-04-08 01:50 PM


Welcome to Passions!

A good stream-of-consciousness!

Corinne

tradewind
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9 posted 2001-04-08 02:11 PM


hi Doug, i posted my comment to your poem as a topic instead of reply...sorry about that..
anyway, i enjoyed your style, very familiar
to me. nice flow of words for an enjoyable read.

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2001-04-08 02:27 PM


sometimes I feel as though
your face is shrouded by moonlight
and hidden by the sun
though standing unquestioned that light
should reveal where shadows cast
=====================
the truth is as the truth may be
unknown to earthling man
=======================
for now I see not by my gaze
not by the wash of suns rays
rather by heart and mind and soul
yet to distinguish and let truth be known
still I am not wise enough
nor believe I shall ever be
because I as you, we are sand and dust
laid upon this earth to ask
even if we shall never know
=====================
Hi Doug ...Please add my welcome to Poetry Land to the list...
this is a very cool,spiritual, ethereal,elemental, write of depth.
great imagery and I enjoyed the smooth mix of rhyme and free verse flow of this.
very well written, with wonderful poetic phrasing.
I look forward to reading more of your impressive work.
nice to have you here with us  
JM

Looking hard into your eyes,
There was nobody I'd ever known.
Such an empty surprise ...
To feel so alone.
~jackson browne~

Ethan Halo
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11 posted 2001-04-08 03:07 PM


the last two lines drove the point very well...
it reminded me of a quote:
"the night is full of mystery.
even when the moon is at its brightest
secrets hide everywhere.
Then the sun rises and its rays cast so
many shadows that the day creates more
illusion than all the veiled truth of the night."

welcome... i hope ya enjoy your stay.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"For a dreamer, night's the only time of day"

Doug Pretorius
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12 posted 2001-04-08 03:33 PM


Thank you everyone for your very warm and loving welcome!  
Irish Rose
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13 posted 2001-04-08 03:56 PM


Welcome to Passions, enjoyed the read.

Kathleen Blake

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and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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14 posted 2001-04-08 05:01 PM


Hi Doug, it is me, Noah! I go by the name Mistletoe Angel here because I used that name before I turned to Singing Sparrow elsewhere and I'm stuck with this. I am so happy to see you here, and to read your wonderful work! I loved your debut poem here, it had a very powerful voice and expression within. May your love and wisdom be heard all throughout this wonderful forum! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Doug Pretorius
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15 posted 2001-04-08 05:18 PM


I've been wondering when I'd see you pop up Noah   Thanks for inviting me here, it looks like a great forum!
helen smith
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16 posted 2001-04-08 07:09 PM


Loved it .We  are never seen when we stand in the brilliance of the sun .Stand in front of the darkness and then you can see who you really are
doreen peri
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17 posted 2001-04-08 07:25 PM


wanna know the

TRUTH????



you ROCK!!!!!!!

.....and this one's got me believing....
in LOVE
beyond
the pain

*wink*

loved it  

quote:
we are sand and dust
laid upon this earth to ask
even if we shall never know


.....perfectly lyrically absolutely ......
!!!!!awesome!!!!

Nan
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18 posted 2001-04-08 09:36 PM


Well now - You've certainly made a grand entrance... I, too, extend a grand welcome... This is a wonderfully Passionate Place - You're gonna love it here...
Lone Wolf
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19 posted 2001-04-08 09:38 PM


Welcome to Passions.  Looking forward to seeing you here again.  Very nice write.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

SEA
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with you
20 posted 2001-04-08 10:51 PM


Doug~ Welcome!! I enjoyed this very much....."though important questions are
                    rarely asked and never answered"  that hit home with me...great writing     SEA

[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 04-08-2001).]

Severn
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21 posted 2001-04-09 06:12 AM


Welcome welcome welcome...

I'm not going to critique your first poem lol..but I'll definitely be looking out for more...

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Kit McCallum
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22 posted 2001-04-09 06:17 AM


Welcome to Passions Doug!  This is a wonderful first post, filled with the ponderings of life, I really enjoyed this, and look forward to reading more from you!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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