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tradewind
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0 posted 2001-04-08 02:19 AM


and when they come...
those times when you
will curse the mirror
pound Frustration
till it bleeds
it's then, i'll hold you

and when they come...
the stares from strangers
turning, wincing
as though wounded
by your scars
it’s then, i’ll touch you

and when it comes...
the acid water
rotting wooden
platitudes
till dams release
each burning wave
of pride

it's then, i'll show you
a reflection
force your gaze
to meet my eyes

how beautiful...


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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2001-04-08 03:55 AM


Very well written  
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2 posted 2001-04-08 04:12 AM


as though wounded
by your scars
it’s then, i’ll touch you

and when it comes...
the acid water
rotting wooden
platitudes
till dams release
each burning wave
of pride

it's then, i'll show you
a reflection
force your gaze
to meet my eyes

how beautiful...
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indeed....beautiful devotions
very cool imagery

"the acid water
rotting wooden
platitudes
till dams release
each burning wave
of pride"

very cool.

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

tradewind
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3 posted 2001-04-08 01:54 PM


Brad, thank you so much for your reply

Janet Marie, glad you liked this one, thanks for the nice words!

suthern
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4 posted 2001-04-11 03:16 PM


To be reflected as beautiful in another's loving eyes... what a great thing to see. *S* I liked this!
tradewind
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5 posted 2001-04-11 04:10 PM


suthern, glad you enjoyed this
thanks for the comment!

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6 posted 2001-04-11 06:19 PM


tradewind. . . this is how it should be. . .

excellent. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

tradewind
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7 posted 2001-04-11 11:19 PM


yes, Sven, how it should be...

thank you

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