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With A Look |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
He takes her cheeks in trembling hands Raises tear drenched eyes to his own The question dies on his lips, unasked Just one look Thats all it took To set him free She kept the truth well hidden In eyes he knew so well But in that one unguarded moment With a look With just one look She set him free He let his hands drop to his side She was his sun, til her eyes revealed That the sun had long since set And her look That honest look Just set him free It wont be easy letting go Of a life that was supposed to be forever He turns his back, as she walks away He didnt look That one last look Because he was free |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ This is so very sad. 'The question dies on his lips, unasked' Sometimes it happens just this way ... Poignantly told, hon. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Yes his freedom sounds cruel. Nice poem. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula~ Your poem has touched my heart with a heavy, familiar hand...such saddness in being "free" when we don't want to be...but in time freedom will become a gift...when compared to loving and not being loved in return...sorry I guess I'm lost in the situation that this poem brought to mind in my own life...as poetry often does. Fantastic writing~ |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Exceptional poem. Someone is always hurt when love dies. Melton |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
This is sooo sad. To quote a favorite song..Freedom is just another word for nothing else to lose. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
....and far too cruel to continue hoping to rekindkle something long after the sun has set.... well done, my Paula.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula sister mine, if I had any doubt that you were a fabulous writer, after reading this I wouldn't have. I never have had any doubt of course, I knew you were soooo talented. This says it all love, and yes I LOVE IT Utterly wonderful work Talking of which I must now fly away again Love and warm stuff Mushy  Fabulous work utterly outstanding Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
If I ever have to go, that's the way I want it ... short, quick, and undeniable. Magnificent work! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
How gentle and loving these words are! Kathleen Blake |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Paula---This is so sad but so good. It is my new Paula Finn favorite! Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
It is fabulous ..... you did it so well. We all know the look. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Paula....I can only echo all of the above. Bob |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, know that look.....this just ripps at the heart....so very well done Paula!!  SEA |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Marge...just something I needed to say...thanks for the hugs they are very much welcome this morning thecraig...goodbyes usually are somewhat cruel...even good ones...thanks Holly...Im sorry if I brought bad things to mind...freedom...well that can be so many things to so many people...but you are right...losing your heart sigh girl now you have me going on...HUGS Melton...yes you are right...someone always loses...and its sad indeed...thank you Alan...and who do you like singing that song? Janis or Kris? I ahve them both and its always a toss up for me...thanks Sunshine...yes it is cruel...especially when you know you dont intend on staying...thansk for understanding Marsha...sis of my heart...I can always count on you to lift my soul...thanks Interloper...better quickly than spun out over years...thats just a waste of a life...thank you Irish Rose...thank you JLR...your fav huh? Thanks lil darlin that means a great deal to me helen smith...yes i think we all do unfortunately RMW...well from you I will take that echo...thanks SEA...you are always such a joy to haveread my stuff...thanks |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When lips tell lies... check the eyes. *S* This is well written sadness... goodbyes are never easy... especially when one still hoped. |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Eyes can only decieve so long...then you see the truth...and sometimes thats painful...but sometimes it does set you free... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well done Paula! Sometimes the love just disappears or it was never there all the way in the first place....what can you do if you're on the recieving end of love that's no more? Not much, just write a poem like this and keep on going. |
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