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helen smith
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0 posted 2001-04-08 12:00 PM



He met her by chance
Her powerful presence crossed the planet
perfuming the elixir of his mind
He said he loved her
Absorbing the words,she ached to understand
And hidden  like in his darkened motel room
She wrote  soundless in the gloom.
Her man ,sobbing for his stolen thoughts,
With unbearable sharing took her hand
And called  enough
Give up .
He tempted her to his room
Roughly winning
But can the addict deny the opium
Or the sinning

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thecraig
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1 posted 2001-04-08 05:51 AM


Strong poem the internet is a strong attaction.

Waseem Cheema
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2 posted 2001-04-08 07:31 AM


I too am the victom of it......U know just for "U" .....
        "Her man ,sobbing for his stolen thoughts"
is very intersting and have the truth.........lolo


I love to nice poetry.

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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-04-08 08:28 AM


Yes...it happens!
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4 posted 2001-04-08 10:09 AM


Oh it happens way too much, and people are way no to careful... For after the they caught you, they know just what to say to keep you and continue.  Cause of many things gone wrong...
Just my thoughts though.
Bernie
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5 posted 2001-04-09 05:31 PM


Nicely stated, especially the following:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
He tempted her to his room
Roughly winning
But can the addict deny the opium
Or the sinning
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
People are human and must learn to forgive the other and, more importantly, themselves.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


JLR
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6 posted 2001-04-09 05:59 PM


That was a shocker, not what I was expecting.  Love the comparison to the addict.  Good write!

Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter

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