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Possum
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since 2001-03-20
Posts 23


0 posted 2001-04-07 08:15 PM


My mind so full of naked sorrow
This truly has been an age of regret
Your sweet ripeness and your blind soul
Has so much to be desired
There is so much of me you cannot see
My world has so many lies and so much deceit

Now here we lay
Closed in our bed
Caught under our sheets

Here we are you and me
My weary life
Your sad unknowing soul

There is so much torture in me
You can never know
What a wicked little monster you have married
And that once you said "I Do"
The mangled life inside of me
Vowed to never let you go


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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
1 posted 2001-04-07 09:30 PM



Oh my, this was intense and painful to read, the last lines really struck me, well expressed!~

Take care,
Melissa~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-04-07 09:36 PM


I know what "naked sorrow" is, believe me, I know....oh my thank you for an intense read.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
3 posted 2001-04-07 09:53 PM


There is so much of me you cannot see
My world has so many lies and so much deceit

it was those two lines that stood out to me...
a sorrowful and dark write....but i like 'em dark.  
good words...and good luck.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"For a dreamer, night's the only time of day"

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2001-04-07 10:24 PM


There is much pain and anguish hidden in these lines.  Very powerful poem.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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