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The Ocean's Only Cry

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SpitFire
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0 posted 04-07-2001 05:56 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

The Ocean's Only Cry

I placed a match to paper strewn, to pages old and torn ,
and curling limbs (which are never sure) rest against the flame,
testing strength and breathing through, what samples leaked instead.

Chances are the night was born for teasing images - dancing,
for answers out of reach and seeing.
We could burn this place and all itís love
and never win the war, or simply ask for seconds
if only seconds were allowed.

We sang through all the circles, we tore ourselves the same.
But still the weatherís asked too much and wishing only cries,
it only weakens me in ways I canít afford.
I would of talked about an aeroplane or the miles in-between,
and hereís been lost a thousand times and bleeding animals - scream.

They carry on with secrets sworn and eventually let go,
how were you to know? - How was any of this alive to you,
if hands were always empty or clenched so tight they whitened?

I gathered burning yesterday wouldnít really do,
so I walked along the empty shores in hours - alone from you.
I could have kicked my way through ashes tumbling
in shadow of every step, but instead I turned and looked inside
the oceanís only cry, and filled myself with cancers running  -
completely unwilling,...to die.
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1 posted 04-07-2001 05:59 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

SpitFire, you constantly amaze me with the images that you show in your writing. . .

superb. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
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2 posted 04-07-2001 06:24 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I placed a match to paper strewn, to pages old and torn ,
and curling limbs (which are never sure) rest against the flame,
==============================

Chances are the night was born for teasing images - dancing,
for answers out of reach and seeing.
We could burn this place and all itís love
and never win the war, or simply ask for seconds
if only seconds were allowed.

We sang through all the circles, we tore ourselves the same.
=========================

They carry on with secrets sworn and eventually let go,
how were you to know? - How was any of this alive to you,
if hands were always empty or clenched so tight they whitened?

I gathered burning yesterday wouldnít really do,
so I walked along the empty shores in hours - alone from you.
I could have kicked my way through ashes tumbling
in shadow of every step, but instead I turned and looked inside
the oceanís only cry, and filled myself with cancers running  -
completely unwilling,...to die.
=============================

I only say this to a small number of poets I deem more brilliant than my small mind can conceive...
"oh how i wish to walk thru your poetic mind barefoot"  

the depth and imagery are equaled by the intensity of the expression.
Your work is often like a diary page that we know we're not supposed to be reading...
but we just cant stop, even when caught.
very very cool write A.

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

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3 posted 04-07-2001 06:41 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

Chances are the night was born for teasing images - dancing,
for answers out of reach and seeing.
We could burn this place and all itís love
and never win the war, or simply ask for seconds
if only seconds were allowed.

you are a wonderful writer..I enjoyed this

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


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4 posted 04-07-2001 08:03 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Oh how I love the ocean - yes I've walked this lonely shore, oh My, I loved this
and by the way thank you for your reply on my post, of course you can print anything I write, I'm honored, I loved the images you portrayed in this.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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5 posted 04-07-2001 09:10 PM       View Profile for Auguste   Email Auguste   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Auguste's Home Page   View IP for Auguste

SpitFire,

This is an incredible piece of writing with great imagery.  I much enjoyed this.  Thank you.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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6 posted 04-07-2001 10:44 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

There you go again, A.  Very deep writing here my friend.  You have quite a talent for conveying just the right image.  Awesome write, you.  ~smile and hug~  Keep it up.  I am loving this.  

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by the grace of God.
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 04-08-2001 06:54 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

I read this through several times...and each
read brought me deeper and deeper into this
poem...fantastic writing...the level of
emotion, imagery and pure poetic talent are
awesome...your gift is evident...thank you
for sharing it here...with all of us~
serenity blaze
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8 posted 04-09-2001 12:46 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I gathered burning yesterday wouldnít really do,
so I walked along the empty shores in hours - alone from you.
I could have kicked my way through ashes tumbling
in shadow of every step, but instead I turned and looked inside
the oceanís only cry, and filled myself with cancers running  -
completely unwilling,...to die.

This is fantastic. If that does not perfectly describe the ache of separation and lonliness, then what is this awful feeling I have while reading? Speaking of stabbing imagery!   Totally stunning.
Saunni
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9 posted 04-09-2001 06:58 PM       View Profile for Saunni   Email Saunni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saunni

Oh, this is beyond great!! Just so good! I loved this and I agree...you are very talented.  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Brad Majors
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10 posted 04-09-2001 07:06 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

Wow. Its ahrd to find words to say. This piece is simply amazing and make the rest of us feel merely hacks in the presence of such talent!  
insect
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11 posted 04-10-2001 12:34 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

This is Fire of Fire Fire!
VAS
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12 posted 04-10-2001 12:47 AM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

Extremly powerful images, poignant story.
serenity blaze
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13 posted 04-10-2001 06:00 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Came back for a re-read...and? love it more! love the meter, and internal rhyme and the assonance just gave it a little oom-pa! (like it needed it!) This one is a treasure of pain...should I do an evil grin? naw... you KNOW that's a compliment! love you, and this work especially spoke to me..thank you!
Nan
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14 posted 04-10-2001 07:31 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

A 'Paragon' of virtue, my friend... I'm picturing you strolling along that introspective beach... Nicely done...
Dark Angel
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15 posted 05-27-2001 08:33 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

sighhh,
another superb piece of writing.

excellent, excellent!
I'm with Serenity, "stabbing imagery" indeed!

Maree  

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oh how great is this one,love it so much  
Dark Angel
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17 posted 04-18-2002 06:33 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I gathered burning yesterday wouldnít really do,
so I walked along the empty shores in hours - alone from you.
I could have kicked my way through ashes tumbling
in shadow of every step, but instead I turned and looked inside
the oceanís only cry, and filled myself with cancers running  -
completely unwilling,...to die.


I want to write like you Alicia
this is achingly beautiful and I'm in awe of your talent, still.  




Maree

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (04-18-2002 06:33 PM).]

Janet Marie
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18 posted 08-04-2004 07:42 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I wanna write like this when my muse grows up.
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