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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2001-04-06 06:49 PM



Rock me to sleep
in the comfort of your whisper
hold me close
like your long forgotton teddy bear
kiss me in the shadow of our memory
tell the moon that you love me
every night under starry skies
for soon the dark clouds will disapear
and we finally realize
we were only as far
as our hearts.


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Rosebud1229
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1 posted 2001-04-06 06:54 PM


Brad, you've did it again, such a sweet lullabye

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making my eyes tear up here.....*sigh*   love this    SEA
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3 posted 2001-04-06 07:15 PM


Thank you both. I am glad you liked it!  
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4 posted 2001-04-07 03:03 PM


Ohh I can hear this lullaby! I have hummed this tune myself! You did an awesome job of this piece. Thank you for the lovely poem that caused a weary soul to smile.

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5 posted 2001-04-07 03:47 PM


"and we finally realize
we were only as far
as our hearts. "

..... absolutely lovely.....  

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6 posted 2001-04-07 03:52 PM


Tender poetry, Brad. Only one thing I would change.. "starry" *ducks and hopes she does't get slapped* reach inside yourself for another desription that equals and surpasses "starry" at the same time. It will fit the rest of your poem better.  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

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7 posted 2001-04-07 04:11 PM


I love this one, Brad.  The line about the forgotten teddy bear was awesome.  

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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8 posted 2001-04-09 02:01 AM


Thank you all I'm glad you liked it. Temptress thanks for the idea will rhink on it
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