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A Muted Love
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A Muted Love |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Shakespearean sonnet (abab cdcd efef gg) A Muted Love Where do we go when silence is our speech And tears are shed in lonely solitude; When open love is way beyond our reach And fantasies are gone and dreams elude? We see it leaving but are scared to tell Afraid that wording it will make it so; Where were the lovers when the shadows fell Afraid to bid good-bye or say hello? Love came as quick as any bright Spring dawn And overwhelmed their hearts with childlike glee, But like a pregnant fog had slowly gone And left two strangers staring out to see Two hearts had loved, had cared, had laughed, had cried, Forever Valentines, this day had died. by Panne iPlease ask for permission before you copy my work to your files or a greeting card. Thank you. Panne/i |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The imagery was wonderful....thank you for this! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know where to go for I gone there many times...James |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Wonderful!!  SEA |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
We seek and some how we find. Lovely sonnet. Shakespeare would be proud. Joyce |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm very pleased to see poets who love to write in form keeping me company here at Passions. We're in the minority, but that's OK... I like the other guys anyway...  This is nicely done - iambic pentameter and rhyme scheme intact - and theme developed nicely... I'm hoping to see lots more of your work. Do you have your own site?...  |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Sunshine - Thank you for reading and commenting. James, where? Sea - Thanks so much. Joyce - thank you so much Nan - There are a few of us left, here and there, near and far away. Thank you for you input. No, I have no site - I'm lucky I can find this place and post replys let alone anything else- Have no idea how this works yet and definitely have no idea how to get a site. <---computer idiot here.---> Panne |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
People who write such lovely poetry are allowed to be slow learners when it comes to computers. |
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Doug Pretorius Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 81Ontario, Canada |
Owww! The sadness in the end cut right into my soul. I thought the rest of the poem was somewhat sad, but the last two lines brought it to a shape piercing demise. Ahhh! Terrible and thus great! |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
PdeV, Why thank you very much for your kind thoughts: but ya know, it is a pain that I have so much trouble with this medium - I know I just need someone close to teach me but till I find someone I learn it on my own and slowly - almost everything I have learned I learned by accident - this is the truth I am sorry to say. Doug - thanks you for taking time to reading and give me your thoughts too - it meant a lot to know how you viewed this and is very helpful. I also am glad you liked it. Panne |
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