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The Trip to Beautiful

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Martie
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The Trip to Beautiful

She is laced with feelings
to the base of this green mountain
where she has poured out her sorrow
and watched it bloom yearly
with great soggy tears.

On the oak trees
that line the streets
are her babies names,
engraved with the date
when her heart stopped for a minute
and tried to capture them,
hold them,
before the scampering of time
took them away.

She has loved in the grass
and sighed into the night of this neighborhood
until she has become as familiar
as the morning dove.

The duct tape holds her feelings in
and is wound tight to the curb
where number 614 is painted in white,
yet she knows of the infinite possibilities
that are alive in her.

Does she dare climb the roof
and search all the miles to the ocean
and find some otherness that has eluded her?

So she changed her route
and took the narrow road that led
to who knows where, because the same thing
was making her soggy.

That was when she saw the truth
waiting for her in every reflection,

and she was beautiful.





[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 04-06-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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In every facet, you are most beautiful....and this was heart-wrenching....

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Martie~ this is amazing.....   SEA
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yes this is amazing. You have quite alot of talent!
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well - I know one beautiful poet - who writes very convincing poetry - even when I need to have it explained
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5 posted 04-05-2001 08:57 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~ Martie~ Martie~
Almost too beautiful for words ...
*Hugs*
~*Sis*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 04-06-2001 02:55 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Sometimes the beauty (or all we really needed all along) is right before our eyes, if we only open them.  I loved this.

~*~ I write, therefore I am ~*~

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Well Martie, I was about to sign off and get to bed BUT I saw your post and I couldn't resist a 'MartieRead' before hitting the dreamland sheets...
So once again sweetie, you've shared with us another beautiful poem and I thank you for ending my night with this most enjoyed read...
Hugs2uPoetFriend
~coco~
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Truly beautiful...

Martie, my regards to you,
Sudhir
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Karilea--You are always so sweet.

Sea--thanks so much for your amazing reply.

Brad--Hi...I appreciate you stopping by...glad you have joined our family here at PIP.

Bill--Sometimes my mind wonders into places that are not easily understood...thanks for asking.

Marge--thanks for being such a good editor..hugs.

Sharon--thank you for understanding the simple of what I was trying to say.

Coco--I haven't seen you for awhile..so glad you stopped to read this...your reply made me smile.

Sudhir--regards to you too, my friend.
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That was when she saw the truth
waiting for her in every reflection,

and she was beautiful.

What a reward for risking a change of direction! *S* This goes from sadness to soaring, Martie... and does so with beauty.
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Hey hon...another marvellously written piece....

how do you do it?

There were a couple of things I wanted to point out

'great soggy tears of weep.'

I see what you were doing with this...yet in essense it's tautological (repeating the same thing) tears and weep are basically the same...so I'd changed the word 'tears' into something else to describe 'weep'

also -
'and find some otherness that has alluded her?'

is alluded supposed to be eluded?

Hugs hon...loved it...

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

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Ok... lets just say... WOW!  Read this a few times through... and WOW!  A depth of feeling here that is hard to match.  The reflection is you... held in you writing... beautiful in deed.  Peace.

... and thanks for the read... it was good to be seen by one such as you.  
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Ruth--Yes, a reward, what a lovely way to look at it.

Kamla--Yes, you are so right...thank you for your eyes...and brain of course...I'll make some changes.  Hugs!

Scott--Thanks for the beauiful and the wow...both are very much appreciated.
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14 posted 07-27-2004 10:56 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Martie, you are a kind soul to have pointed me in the direction of this beautiful verse of yours.  It does help.  Obviously, you do understand where my poem came from.  *hugs a bunch* ....jo

PS:  I'm saving this for further inspiration which, indeed, is needed.  
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