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RMW
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0 posted 2001-04-05 03:03 PM


The Landing at Tarawa

There was the reef;
A nasty gape of coral,
Like broken teeth
It gnawed flesh,
Ankles, shins, wrists.
Then,
As though the nightmare of an addict's dream
Had suddenly become reality,
Needles burst upward through the lagoon's skin.
In the bubbles of drowning men
Blood surfaced.
Finally, the ten-foot beach began.
All that day
Marines refused to move inland.

RMW

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-04-05 03:08 PM


Stark imagery....the fear comes through clearly....

well done Sir!

Andrew Scott
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2 posted 2001-04-05 03:10 PM


Can't even imagine what it must have been like... beach landings under hostile fire and some of the worst conditions... I don't think I really want to know, but its something we should never forget... least we have to do it all over again.  Peace to you and yours.
RMW
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3 posted 2001-04-05 03:15 PM


Sunshine.....thank you.    Bob

Andrew..."..pax vobiscum..."   Bob

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2001-04-05 03:32 PM


i liked the flow and yes the imagery works well yuh
Just A Woman
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5 posted 2001-04-05 07:44 PM


Your descriptiveness in this, Bob, is excellent.  Not too much, but just enough to grab the reader.  



"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

RMW
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6 posted 2001-04-05 08:25 PM


Wayoutwalt .... and ... Just A Woman....Thank you both for commenting on a topic close to my heart.  Bob
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