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PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-04-04 10:47 AM

I stole a silhouette or two
Traced the lonely edges in shades of grey
And shamed myself when through
The forms, fearful and fey,
Holding steady in wanton sway

Timeless hearts on verge of dust
Onto slivers of shapeless thought
And broken pieces of trust
The web on which I am caught,
Fighting the vain fight once had fought

I captured those silhouettes at last
By design, or by some other art
And guilt, for the loss of the past
In which I played no small part,
Finally a plan I could not thwart

Each line blends into the next
The fading edges in frozen fire
And lost in sublime context
But each time willfully inspire
Another with its shadow as sire

I missed a silhouette or two
Slipping softly from steadfast clutch
And fading from grey to blue
Ever just beyond a fleeting touch,
Yet senseless, as sorrow and such

To transcend this lessened degree
Valiant, but soon misplaced
And replaced, by a newer version of me
One with the same outwardly open face,
For someone else in shades of grey to trace

I returned those silhouettes I stole
Unto mastered memories
And from this bottomless hole
Allowed them to fly forever free,
Upon wings of valkyries

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-04-04 10:56 AM

You, Sir, have a vocabulary that is to be admired, and some of my favorite words captured within are fey, silhouette, sublime, transcend........

well done....a keeper....

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 04-04-2001).]

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2001-04-04 10:59 AM

So well crafted! It as has in air of antiquity about it.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-04-04 11:55 AM

" One with the same outwardly open face,
For someone else in shades of grey to trace"

This is a good way to describe my morning.....
nicely done...

SEA

jfreak
Member

since 1999-06-17

Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA

4 posted 2001-04-04 12:10 PM

Hey there PK,

I see you are from cajun land, as am I...orginally. Anyway, this poem really made me search. I had to go check on a lot of different words, and names, b/c I wasn't sure what you were exactly intending to mean here. Nice use of Norse mythology though.
Great poem, I am going to have to read it more though to get the full meaning, b/c I am still a little puzzled, but you got me captured.

J~

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

5 posted 2001-04-04 03:13 PM

Thanks to all.

Hello Jfreak, my old neighbor!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-04-04 07:37 PM

I can hear the Wagner now PK. . .

excellent. . .

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