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The Orchestra.....(pantoum)
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The Orchestra.....(pantoum) |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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The Orchestra while basses play the bottom line a piccolo peeps the piper's peaks and trumpets blast the fanfare twined with french horn blares from tightened cheeks a piccolo peeps the piper's peaks trombones slide through countless notes with french horn blares from tightened cheeks a tuba blats with bulbous bloats trombones slide through countless notes as clarinets arpeggiate a tuba blats with bulbous bloats gong sits and counts and waits and waits as clarinets arpeggiate oboes, flutes soar through the air gong sits and counts and waits and waits bassoon quacks out its duckly flair oboes, flutes soar through the air strings pluck and glide their pitches plush bassoon quacks out its duckly flair a lone harp makes a heartbeat rush strings pluck and glide their pitches plush while maestro waves dramatically a lone harp makes a heartbeat rush to music's pulse, climatically while maestro waves dramatically the drums bash out before too long to music's pulse, climatically with punctuation from the gong the drums bash out before too long and trumpets blast the fanfare twined with punctuation from the gong while basses play the bottom line "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
What an idea Mike!!! And you pulled it off terrifically !!! Great pantun. I must confess I'm short on time and didn't check each and every line for the pantun pattern but it looks and sounds right. WTG. Panne |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thanks Panne.....this one was a bit harder than the last one I did. I think I got the lines right, but was too tired to check after doing it.LOL I'll ponder over it later. Mike |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Bravo! I think the only thing it lacks is peanut butter. *grins* 
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
JAW.....ROTFLMAO....Glad you liked it! BTW, where is your peanut butter challenge? Did you see mine I posted on your thread? Mike |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
You were the maestro with flare in this wonderful pantoum. My favorite phrase: "as clarinets arpeggiate." "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I'm working on it, Mike! *grins* Yep, unfortunately now everytime I see your name I think about peanut butter. LOL
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you JL. This was a fun write. One of my favorite tricks for this one was using the "while basses play the bottom line" as the first line so it would in fact end up being the bottom line. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
JAW.....LOL. I guess that challenge suggestion is going to stick to the roof of my poectic presence here. *S* |
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